Fjettel and I

By The Chosen One

Thu, 05 Feb 2009
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Thinking of myself again,
All the troubles inside,
Pity for those who have less,
My confusion clouds my mind.

I always loved the freedom,
When youthful days did thrive,
The times laying in the sand,
Once with Fjettel by my side.

If all that love is,
Is governed by our heart,
My heart beats for her,
So we'll never be apart.

Time takes its toll on feelings,
As their strength starts to fade,
But memories always come find us,
Like Fjettel and I.

Certificate U
Journey To The Future
Love

Comments

Submitted by jennifer on
This is lovely, has a very old-fashioned feeling, but it would be even better if the lines 'scanned' properly. Have you tried counting syllables? Fjettel - what does the name mean? J x

 

Submitted by The Chosen One on

Submitted by jennifer on
Heavens, I am currently teaching six days a week, so having time to give any more lessons is a wonderful concept! Thank you very much for the compliment...may I ask what it is about my writing that you like? I shall await enlightenment on 'Fjettel'! J x

 

Submitted by The Chosen One on