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Cherry

By jennifer

Wed, 01 Apr 2009
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9 comments
 

Love like snowstorms
Caught in glass globes,
You blow circles, dizzying.

I mount your carousel.

You buck and twist as
I grip your golden pole,
Watch the world swirl, swing.

Certificate 12
Poem
Mind Stew (2009)
Love

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Seriously ... I have always had a 'thing' about those little glass, glittery globes. They have always fascinated me. Your poem sums up the sight, perfectly. T x

 

Submitted by Ewan on
Hmm... I never saw anything like what Jen describes in one of those globes... did it come from Amsterdam? (I liked this one Jen.) Ewan

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Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'Love like snowstorms Caught in glass globes, You blow circles, dizzying' - Loved the imagery of the first stanza! Such a compact poem that says so much ;) Well done! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by jennifer on
Haha, Ewan, no, just two different images that sum up the dizzy, disorientating nature of love and sex... Thanks for the comments, folks! 30 words seems so small, now I'm writing whole chapters of my 'novel' hahaha! J x

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
In fact, Ewan, I think it probably came from Geleen Straat, in den Haag:-) That's the lovely thing about life - there are are many ways of looking at things. Now, I'm dizzy ... and I'm going to bed. T X

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Excellent imagery - slightly-wicked but very good. I like it.

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
You buck and twist as I grip your golden pole, Yes, I think I see where you're coming from LOL. Great piece, well done and well deserving of the cherry! Chris XX P.S. Now get back to the story! ;)

Submitted by Curse of 222 on
simple, effective, lovely and arousing...all in this little package. amazing. congrats on the cherry jason

jason

Submitted by mariaduffy on
Beautiful little poem, packed full of very vivid imagery - erotic and beautifully told. Excellent. Maria x

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