On and on

By Dynamaso

Mon, 20 Apr 2009
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On and on, ad infinitum, repetition;
the treat is not so sweet with this carry on.
Over and over till boredom is a relief;
this repetitiveness feels completely wrong.

The treat is not so sweet with this carry on,
ditto after ditto, repeating endlessly.
This repetitiveness feels completely wrong;
so rewind, reverse and repeat after me.

Ditto after ditto, repeating endlessly
until any sense of moment is truly gone.
Rewind, reverse and repeat after me,
the singer might be different but not the song.

Echo upon echo, a cacophonous replay,
breaking down any sense of recognition.
Word and sound get carried away;
on and on, ad infinitum, repetition.

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Submitted by mykle on
I'm still half asleep and I'm not sure what this is repeating. Is it that repetition brings boredom or that simply the realisation that there is nothing new under the sun and it's simply that the cycles vary in length to produce the illusion of change. Interesting musical concept anyway, Dyna. several repeating phrases of differing length looping together but giving constantly changing harmonies and dissonances. Maybe I should just go back to bed :O)

Submitted by Dynamaso on
LOL This is more an exercise in the pantoum form, something I enjoy challenging myself with occasionally. Of course, interpretation is up to the individual reader (in defiance to my high school English teacher who once told me a poem can only have one meaning - the right one). I'm pleased you, at the very least, were able to make something of this, even if you had just got out of bed.

 

Submitted by mykle on
:O)

Submitted by mykle on
:O)

Submitted by mykle on
Another multiple post. Still, it won't hurt your read count Dyna :O)

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Nah, won't hurt a bit. Thanks x 3 ;)

 

Submitted by Ewan on
A comment on the limitations of the form? Seven layers of meaning, according to TS Eliot, your teacher wasn´t into poetry much, I think.

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Submitted by Dynamaso on
Ewan, as good a meaning as any. Coincidentally, it was Eliot we were studying when my teacher made her comment. She lurved Eliot and would rhapsodise for hours about his work. While I have an appreciation of him now, he never caught the attention of me or my class mates.

 

Submitted by Ewan on
Eliot is someone who I read without looking too hard for any meaning at all. I do enjoy the writing, imagery and all the rest of it. Might as well explain a handful of dust.

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Submitted by Dynamaso on
I haven't read anything of his for ages. I know I have a collection somewhere...

 

Submitted by sunshine on
"more an exercise in the pantoum form" poetry for poetrys sake then? Good rhythm and some excellent phrasing. Margot

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Thanks Margot and you're right; it is poetry purely for the sake of it.