Echoes
By jennifer
Thu, 13 Aug 2009
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Echoes (13th August 2009, 0.09am)
I thought I heard your voice
and the echo of your smile,
surely you brushed my cheek
with hands, revered, reviled;
these strange, imagined things
taunt me as I walk my dreams,
I wake and punctuate the night
with the whispers of screams;
is it the years that stretch to fill
the chasms carved by time?
Do the minutes yawn like dogs
as distance slips and slides?
My body still seeks your bends,
she will not be ruled; I find
resolutions cannot hold fast
in the face of echoed lies;
we mistook our lust for love,
tried to fit like broken halves,
but what sustains the head
too often poisons the heart.
Jennifer Pickup
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Back with a bang Jen. Good
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Back with a bang Jen. Good to see/read you again. To many good lines here to separate but love the last stanza particularly; maybe for the truth therein contained.
Chris XX
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It's great to have you back
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
It's great to have you back Jen ;) There's some wonderful images here, I love:
'Do the minutes yawn like dogs
as distance slips and slides?'
and
'My body still seeks your bends,
she will not be ruled;'
oh and
'we mistook our lust for love,
tried to fit like broken halves,'
Hope we'll see more poetry from you soon!
Magic xxx
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I have so missed you poetry,
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I have so missed you poetry, Jennifer and was pleased when I saw this posted today.
"I wake and punctuate the night
with the whispers of screams;
is it the years that stretch to fill
the chasms carved by time?"
... My favourite lines.
Tina X
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New Hi! Jennifer lovely to
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Hi!
Jennifer lovely to hear from you.
This is great all of it the verse me
same as Mistakenmagic
.
Is it the years that stretch to fill
the chasms carved by time?
Do the minutes yawn like dogs
as distance slips and slides.
Great. left mess; to you and thanks
re: altering one mine you mentioned now done
"Silence Is Golden"!
what glam photo wow1 blonde!
julie x (:-
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Your metaphors are very
Permalink Submitted by ScribbleScribe on
Your metaphors are very interesting. Very interesting indeed, and, I especially liked the line "with hands,revered,reviled;".
Two R-words in the same line. Nice!
Sophia Grace
Sophia Grace
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