His Father's Eyes
By Silver Spun Sand
Wed, 16 Sep 2009
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Through half-closed blinds
shards of light pierce stuccoed walls
inciting them bear witness to the end
of this long night’s journey into dawn;
a crumpled fist defiantly curled in mine.
So soundly asleep – lay my cheek
next to his, so soon bruised by the world.
A tap drips in the sink – thrums a largo beat
and in the stove, yesterday’s coals grow cold.
He stirs; grabs at life with all ten fingers
and I pray to God no child of his will see
a faded army photo – hear someone say,
“That was your dad. You’ve got his eyes.
Did you know that, son?”
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very poignant and beautiful
Permalink Submitted by sarah wilson on
very poignant and beautiful Tina x
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Simple, sad, lovely and
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Simple, sad, lovely and effective.
Chris XX
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Simple, sad, lovely and
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Simple, sad, lovely and effective.
Chris XX
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Well done on the cherry Tina
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Well done on the cherry Tina - richly deserved!
'Through half-closed blinds
shards of light pierce stuccoed walls'
- wonderful opening lines!
Magic xxx
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Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-Spun-Sand
Congrats: on the Cherry
I didn't answer so sad I knew
that it could mean your daughter
and I guessed you put Son and turned
it around. well done.
julie xxx
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brings me to tears as if
brings me to tears as if remembering a childhood i never had, a father i never knew, thank you for the chilling insight, i am working through your poems, but i am marginally worse at reading them than i am at writing them so, through all yours i will go and hopefully be inspired more, my first cherry was from a poem inspired by your work. many thanks
chris
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might i suggest you read
might i suggest you read death in battle or death in the rain maybe a few others on my list maybe even a shepherds sacrifice to wet your appetite
best wishes
chris
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Very nice :). Not much else
Very nice :). Not much else I can say, mind. Just a great poem.
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