Words

By shoe

Wed, 13 Jan 2010
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7 comments
 

How few words you've written
in the space below the verse,
your wishes are polite, succinct,
duly sent, second class.

Inside the melting blood stains seep
into this lake, froze decades since
winter sighs, resumes her grip
no solstice sun can warm this deep.

A repeated pattern, a tired refrain
words have failed me, us, I pray
"I don't know what to say", you said
killing me again.

Certificate 15
Poem
They don't mean to, but they do
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Comments

Submitted by kheldar on
I'll write a few words below this particular verse if I may, shoe. As ever you have conveyed so much raw emotion in a few words, the way it makes me feel inside makes me hope that empathy and imagination are your inspiration, the fact such feelings may actually be inside you makes me want to give you a hug xx

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Submitted by shoe on
Kheldar, You may write a many as you wish, hugs are so warming!

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Clever and I don't know what else to say, other than I like it and I never know what to expect, when I open one of yours Shoe but - so far - I haven't been disappointed. ;)

Submitted by Mangone on
As usual Kheldar puts it very well Miss shoe We hope it's a poem and you're not really blue!

Submitted by Firebird on
Simply magnificent, shoe x:)

 

Submitted by shoe on
thank you Threeleafshamrock, Pleased you liked this one, Mangone, summer is coming, I have it on good authority! Firebird, thank you so much, :~}

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new shoe yes, we can all do with hugs, don't always get or give them hope things improve. julie x.