Would you?

By Firebird

Tue, 09 Feb 2010
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If you could only see
the scarecrow of my soul,
Would you scale
the hedges of my heart
and navigate the fields of time?
Would you scatter the seeds
of self -doubt to the seven winds
and mask our fall
behind a cloud of uncertainty?
For as the dust settles, my love,
on our future...
You need to know;
Would you?
Hear it , feel it , see it , taste it...
on your lips.
I am here for you...
Now... Not forever
and you...Alone.

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Comments

Submitted by kheldar on
Hi Firebird, I love this poem. I particularly like the "scarecrow of my soul", it gives rise in my mind to two totally different intepretations: 1. The person in the piece has a soul that is tattered, standing alone in a field, waiting for their reluctant lover to come to them. 2. Perhaps the scarecrow is doing its job, and keeping him away. I shall ponder upon it. Kheldar :--)

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Submitted by shoe on
Really like the images in this Firebird, "Would you scatter the seeds of self -doubt to the seven winds and mask our fall behind a cloud of uncertainty?" love these lines, beautiful, Shirley.

 

Submitted by Firebird on
Thank you both so much. So pleased you liked it x:)

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'If you could only see the scarecrow of my soul, Would you scale the hedges of my heart and navigate the fields of time?' - those first few lines are just brilliant, Firebird. The whole poem flows so well and is full of brilliant images ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by jennifer on
Fantastic imagery, strong opening, agree with Magic. However, feel it loses 'punch' towards the end... J x