The Winds of War

Cherry

By threeleafshamrock

Sun, 11 Apr 2010
  • 3635 reads
21 comments
 

When winds of war, with fiery cloud
doth form upon the world, a shroud
and death prevails; all life is cheap,
when devils reign and angels weep.

When advocates, of bomb and gun,
convince that love is moribund,
then we -who are by traitors kissed -
must tackle death's evangelist.

Too err, is human and so make
excuses for man's great mistake
but how will He but justify,
a father's rage, a mother's cry.

What useless weapon is your sword,
why should we kneel and call you lord,
when mortar, rips and bloody stains
while curing youthful, growing pains.

Tis easy claim; 'I gave them will,
It's not my choice - but theirs, to kill.'
and passing Pilate's finger bowl,
demand of innocents, their soul.

Certificate 12
Poem
The Words of War
Opinion

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Strong words spoken here, by the narrator, Chris. I particularly admire the second stanza:- "When advocates, of bomb and gun, convince that love is moribund, then we -who are by traitors kissed - must tackle death's evangelist." The rhyming structure works excellently and helps give it a 'punchy' style. A more than rewarding read. Tina XXX

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Tina...it must be watching that new series 'Pacific' on TV. I don't watch much tele (apart from sport), just as well maybe ;) Glad you liked XXX

Submitted by chuck on
Strong, clear and concise. Deserves its own series.

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Cheers Chuck

Submitted by shoe on
Expertly penned, intelligent and thoughtful, watch more T.V, Please!

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Interesting piece Chris, designed to pose questions, probe hearts? Best wishes Lena xxxxxxx

 

Submitted by kheldar on
An excellent poem well worthy of the cherry! David :--)

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Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Shirley...I'll get a portable ;) XXX

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Lena, It's not questions we want...but answers and no one has them ;) XXX

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks David; a favorite subject of mine ;)

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
A well-deserved cherry, Chris! Brilliant rhythm throughout. Your war poetry is always so poignant and heart felt. Well done! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Magic...and a cherry; it must be spring ;)xxx

Submitted by Dynamaso on
This is just brilliant, Chris. A stunning read. I've just finished reading 'The Book Thief' (set in WW2 Germany) then I came across this. Made it even more potent to me.

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Hi D. Read the book thief and it was a fantastic story; recommended it to everyone that I knew. Glad you liked this piece ;)

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Congrats on the well deserved cherry, Chris, of course, but I just popped back to say I bought The Book Thief for my daughter a year or so back (bookworm that she is) and she thoroughly loved the book and I would certainly more than second your recommendation. Tina XXX

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks for coming back Tina. I think it was Nathan that recommended The Book Thief to me and I am so glad that he did; I found it haunting and rewarding on many levels. I am a big Sebastian Faulks fan and would highly recommend anything that he has written really (Birdsong my favorite). Delighted with the cherry too. Chris ;) XXX

Submitted by Beeme on
Hello Chris, sorry I'm so late commenting on this. This is such a thought provoking, stunning poem full of emotion. I really enjoyed, the last stanza ended perfectly and with real power; Tis easy claim; 'I gave them will, It's not my choice - but theirs, to kill.' and passing Pilate's finger bowl, demand of innocents, their soul. The cherry is more than deserved in my opinion :) Beeme xx

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Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thank you Beeme for the kind words, glad you liked. Chris ;) XXX

Submitted by hilary west on
I agree with Chuck's choice of words: this is a strong poem and deeply felt.

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Hilary, glad you liked... ;) XXX

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Nathan, long time, no see. Hope all is well with you. I was actually having a swipe at 'God' (or whatever 'greater power' an individual believes in). I have generally been a bit browned off with him this year; free will, is all very well but I think he should step in now and again. I give my kids as much free will as possible but if they started running round the house, smashing the windows with a golf club, I think I would bloody-well do something about it. Bit of a rant really and war, of course, seemed the perfect vehicle/example. Glad you liked and good to hear from you, thanks mate. Chris ;)