snow

By Sally H

Thu, 22 Jul 2010
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10 comments
 

The hateful sun will disappear,
Take away the woman's fears,
Bring about the glistening snow,
Make the children smile and glow.

Make the frost on the ground
Make the steam come out your mouth,
Make the snowman come alive,
Make the flakes take a dive.

Certificate U
Poem
Other Fiction

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
I did enjoy this poem, because I find the sun to bright and to hot. Though I love the snow. But I suppose I should not complain about the sun really. Sorry I'm ranting on. Good poem. Jenny

 

Submitted by Sally H on
hey jenny thanks glad you enjoyed it. I am kinda new to this and I was really nervous about getting my work out there. And I agree, the sun can get too hot for me too! Sally H

Submitted by Foster on
Hi Sally, I really liked what you did with the second stanza. And in the first, I think you touched on something many of us feel. Nice.

Submitted by Sally H on
Hey Foster Glad you enjoyed it and could relate to it, I guess we're all missing the snow now!. Sally H

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Sally I have only been with ABC Tales for about seven weeks, so I no how you feel. But its fun is'nt it. All the best. Jenny

 

Submitted by crybaby89 on
great poem. u have true talent.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Sally H Yes,definitely a talent. keep writing.Look foreward to more.And a great welcome.AbcTales. julie

Submitted by JackJakins on
Is this Jayd or.. 'Sally'? p.s., if you want to have a read of mine go on my account:), oh and good poem!

Submitted by Sally H on
Hi Jack it isn't Jade but you do know me, ask Jade, and i've already had a look at your stuff it's really good!! Sally H

Submitted by darkenwolf on
its the kid in us i suppose once you stop liking the snow the kid is gone forever -god forbid