The Sands of Time

By darkenwolf

Fri, 27 Aug 2010
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41 comments
 

Tick follows tock follows tick.
But the moments between tick and tock,
They grow ever longer.
Seconds stretch to minutes,
Minutes to hours…

Each new day an eternity,
And I am become the immortal,
Told of in tales of old,
The man ever seeking but one thing,
An ending to this infinite existence.

Tick follows tock follows tick.
The sunset brings new hope,
For if the day can end,
If darkness can fall,
Perhaps mine eyes shall, in finality, close.

Tick follows tock follows tick…

Certificate 12
Poem
Some call it Poetry
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Highhat on
a bit sad darkenwolf ;)who wants to die ? Not me!! Never. But if you are immortal then . . . I guess you would get a bit tired ;) Liked the way the clock ticked eternally. Great effect!

Submitted by darkenwolf on
Thanks Pia, glad you liked it. I suppose it all depends on whether you see death as an end or a beginning. Not a religeous sort but i do believe that there is something after this life - i have my reasons though i won't go into them here. ;)

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'Tick follows tock follows tick. But the moments between tick and tock, They grow ever longer. Seconds stretch to minutes, Minutes to hours…' - I love the imagery of the first stanza, darkenwolf. You describe the feelings so beautifully. Really enjoyed this one ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by darkenwolf on
Thank's Rebecca, the first tow lines have been floating about in my mind for a while but i never got round to doing anything with them until last night. Glad you liked it. waiting for you to post you next piece.

Submitted by Highhat on
When one of my friends died I said to my son that he had become a little star in the sky. My son thought about this for a few days and then reciprocated " He's just in a hole in the ground ". naked truth from a child ;)

Submitted by darkenwolf on
either way Pia, at least the pain comes to an end. ;) Love these debates by the way!

Submitted by celticman on
go on...tell us your reasons?

 

Submitted by Highhat on
I wouldn't dare to say it with a smile darkenwolf. Yes let's have a piece with the reasons, please. You would be able to express it eloquently and elegantly I am sure ;)

Submitted by darkenwolf on
Well Pia, Celtic, to give you some idea try reading the piece i posted call turn around - not autobiographical but there are elements... :0

Submitted by Highhat on
love these debates too ;D

Submitted by Highhat on
okay, will do.

Submitted by Highhat on
It explains a lot ;) Why don't you try for the short story comp.? you tell me the pains of life and I'll tell 100 cures ;D

Submitted by darkenwolf on
You have cures? do tell pleeeaaassse!! I actually did fictionalise the real experience in a short story but i don't think i'll ever post it; its really to close to home; the wounds haven't healed yet. Thinking about the comp though; i will if you will ;D Thanks Pia.

Submitted by Highhat on
You will if I will? I would really have to rack my brain and that could take years ;) No give it a go. I understand you not wanting to get too close to home. The pain is enough without the words isn't it? Well- I saw a butterfly and I smelled the sweet scent of a flower- how's that for starter's? (with or without the apostrophe ?) ;)

Submitted by Highhat on
Though sometimes words do a bit of good- like here- don't you think?

Submitted by darkenwolf on
Is that Zen? ;} To tell you the truth if i didn't have writing... It's absolutely brilliant that i can talk to fellow writers though and you do yourself a dis-service your talent far surpasses mine (to self-effacing?) ;)

Submitted by Highhat on
let's just not wipe each other out- (self- effacing?)-our talent is where we put it- ! I'd better do some writing- that much I have gathered- so no more chat. I'll have to come up with something and in a hurry ;)

Submitted by darkenwolf on
as thee wish. ( i get the last word!) Now get writing!! mush mush! ;}

Submitted by Highhat on
and No it's not Zen- it's Pia ha ha

Submitted by darkenwolf on
i always get those two mixed up! ;0

Submitted by Highhat on
what? Mush mush? Oh I bet you do- that's why your writing just doesn't get through ;-O

Submitted by darkenwolf on
oh now that's harsh! ;}

Submitted by Highhat on
Isn't it ironic ? ;)

Submitted by darkenwolf on
maybe a little bit, you're showing off now! ;}

Submitted by Highhat on
was I? ;)

Submitted by Highhat on
must have forgotten to be self-effasive

Submitted by darkenwolf on
tut tut tut; memory's going that's a bad sign that its. Don't worry i won't hold it against you. Is effasive a vegetable? Oh and does vodka count? it is mad of potatoes - and stuff. ;}

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Highhat. darkenwolf These word's are getting to big for me. I will have to refer to the dictionary. But like chat! julie xx got to go.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new darkenwolf I enjoyed this poem Tick Tock Tock Tick! you, may like as it reminds of mine a bit, to read when you get the time, my 7 Minutes (IP) The Sands Of Time" updated from last year, on my belated pop! julie xx got to go!

Submitted by darkenwolf on
i'll give it a read Julie ;)

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