Bend and Bleed
By jennifer
Wed, 05 Jan 2011
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Bend and Bleed (5th January, 2011)
It might be too late
for apologies
and gives, not takes;
truth disguised
by my vowels
and your consonants,
these bones of mine
you bend and break.
What happened to
the promised lands
of your hands
when they were gentle?
Eyes full of fear,
lost things
that I can’t gather here,
mercurial.
I watch you sleep
and keep my distance.
Where do we earn the right
to bend, make bleed?
At what price is lust sold to
lovers? Who made Gods
of mortal men, then left the
armour on to rust?
Intoxication and whispered
prayers, I hear
you stagger on the stairs
and brace my heart.
Love is an art of balance,
walking lines
that cross too many cares,
ungallant.
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Love the short-line
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Love the short-line structure! That first stanza is out of this world - well done :)
Magic xxx
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new jennifer Really good and
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new jennifer
Really good and true
all stanzas great.
I like the last best.
Intoxication and whispered
prayers,I hear
you stagger on the stairs
and brace my heart
Love is an art of balance,
walking lines
that cross to many cares
ungallant.
happy new year
julie xx
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I love this poem, you use
I love this poem, you use rhyme as a way to move the poem forward - not as a bludgeon. Really well done. :-)
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new Jennifer Thank you for
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Jennifer
Thank you for sharing this memory
Well came from big family always like that
but nothing was done,till spills outside.I was
told. Pop would say at least you know what to exspect.He did like his drink 8 of us when in Navy.
And two of the brother's makes one aware so much rows.Still goes on to-day trying to interact each other,when nothing is quite right aye!
julie xx
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I must have missed this
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I must have missed this before, Jennifer. I am sorry;-)
It is beautiful; poetry at its best.
These four lines especially, are inspired:-
"What happened to
the promised lands
of your hands
when they were gentle?"
T x
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