Joy of being free of life chains

Hi michellerenia, I really hear what you are saying in this poem, I agree with you one hundred per cent, to be free of the chains of rushing around is such a great gift, I'm so glad you have that in your life. Hope you can carry on creating, not only with your writing but with your art aswell. Jenny.

Hello there michellerenia, LEt me begin by saying how much I enjoyed the content and purpose of this poem to share that wonderful positivity in these beautiful words. If I may make a couple fo suggestions as to the form of the poem, which as always, you are completely free to ignore if you disagree with them, the one long line in each stanza acts as defining focus for the reader on the page so it feels unusual for this to shift position in the threee stanzas, particularly with the additional line in the last stanza. As an alternative rendering which I don't think alters the intent but does create a consistency of form I offer the following All has become calm my vision clear, I am forever hopeful never discouraged. Your pessimistic perspective will not bring me to my knees, as my disposition will never let you. I am born with great desire, I am born with great enthusiasm, Let me instead bring you with me on my exciting journey of life, I am born with a fighting spirit. Soaring and gliding, enjoying the rush of the air, I am encircled with gentle kind souls, And only those who soar up high, experience this great joy, Joy of being free of life chains. Sincere apologies if my tinkering offends and many thanks for sharing this here. All best wishes Dave Aim for the stars then if you fail you might still land on the moon, and that's not a bad second best.

That's my very great pleasure michellerenia as well as the purpose of sites like this - to enable us to help one another to grow and, hopefully, improve. Cheers dave Aim for the stars then if you fail you might still land on the moon, and that's not a bad second best.