temptation

By braintrain

Fri, 02 Dec 2011

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beyond the window sits a door
upon whose handle I adore
a keyhole glittering set in gold
through which are riches yet untold
I bow my head and cry out loud
through the glass my foot has plowed
I'm not sure if it is quite kosher
but to the door I have stepped closer
I grab the handle and pull it hard
only to discover the way still barred
by a giant door sized shimmering mirror
in which my greed is very clear.

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This poem is really good.

Permalink Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on Sun, 2011-12-04 03:27

This poem is really good. Anytime you are unsure of spelling, check your dictionary diligently. ie cochure 7th line is spelled -- kosher. Keep up the good work. Richard LP

Richard L. Provencher

thanks...lol.I think I

Permalink Submitted by braintrain on Mon, 2011-12-05 19:23

thanks...lol.I think I haven't actually used that word before in a poem.Now I know but to be honest it seems like it should be spelled my way.Kosher seems kinda odd.it reminds of a cheap shish-ka-bob or something!

but to be kosher i'll spell

Permalink Submitted by braintrain on Mon, 2011-12-05 20:46

but to be kosher i'll spell it your way