The Candle

By The Walrus

Mon, 28 Jan 2013
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9 comments
 

©2013 David Jasmin-Green

The tables are turning, my candle is burning
a venomous yearning for you.
Infernal desire, this monstrous fire
is burning, it's burning right through.
No misinformation in my incantation,
my will it is straight, it is true,
the distance is narrow, as fleet as an arrow
I fly and I'm aiming at you.
My anger congeals and your fate's all but sealed,
resurging I cannot turn back.
Although I once praised you I have to erase you,
I'm sorry; my magic turned black.

Certificate 12
Poem
Alchemical Delights
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by jolono on
Like this Walrus.The way it was written made me read it really fast, like a monologue. Great stuff.

 

Submitted by MS on
a lovely rythmn to this one walrus.

 

Submitted by The Walrus on
Glad you like it, both. Actually it's an old one that I've resprayed and changed the numberplates of, but I've always been fond of it. Actually I'm never entirely happy with the layout of my poems, and for some reason I envisaged this one being long and thin, with short, terse lines.....

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Walrus Very good,I am beginning to hum along. like it all, Although I once praised you I have to erase you, I'm sorry; my magic turned black. Maybe? Your magic could turn red? julie x

Submitted by The Walrus on
I guess it could turn any colour, Cavalcaderl, apparently witches burn candles of all colours, and blood is red.....

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I too enjoyed this one very much, Walrus, and the rhythm, as MS mentions, is particularly effective. Loved this bit:- "No misinformation in my incantation, my will it is straight, it is true," Great stuff...even for a walrus;-) Tina

 

Submitted by The Walrus on
Thanks, Tina, that's much appreciated.

Submitted by seashore on
I'm not usually a fan of rhyming poetry but this is great - as the others have said, what rythm. It should be sung - what about a tune to go with it?

Submitted by The Walrus on
I'll whistle one.....