Now We Are Sixty (I.P.)

By Silver Spun Sand

Thu, 07 Feb 2013
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A Zimmer-frame’s on order –
my bones being to creak
but just the thought of Valentine’s
and my heart skips a beat.

My brain cells are diminishing
and concentration – marred,
thinking, what in heaven’s name,
to write inside your card.

I’ve composed a million ditties
till I’m quite pig-sick of rhymes –
professed undying love for you
unfathomable times...

Love’s more than just a sonnet
or a budding, blood-red rose...
it’s us two in the bathtub,
both playing, ‘Hunt the Soap’!

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Submitted by Cloven Hoof on
This is beautiful! I think the "I've composed a million ditties..." stanza is just masterful. Love it! ......................... www.thesatanicdiaries.net Http://afteriwaspublished.wordpress.com

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks, CH;-)

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-Spun-Sand Tina, Great one for the (I.P.) This week. Last stanza word's it's us two in the bathtub, Both playing 'Hunt the soap' made me laugh! As a child always lost the soap! in a tin bath. Asteroid all on the news by a Professor size of football pitch think. Have a good week-end julie x

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks, Julie. You're quite a start yourself;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on
Great last stanza, Tina. I tried soap-on-a-rope, but it kept getting tangled up on the taps. Cheers Bexley

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks, Bexley...mind you, 'soap on a rope' could be more than challenging - seeing as it takes two to tango;-) Tina

 

Submitted by moonphish on
this is great...especially loved 'pig-sick' and 'hunt the soap' :) - alvin

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Ta, alvin. Ever so;-) Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Loved this poem Tina, and had a smile on my face at the last two lines. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks, Jenny...you put a smile on mine, too;-) Tina

 

Submitted by TVR on
Humorous verse for Valentine’s. Just the job, Tina. However, I doubt very much whether you’d ever be stuck for what words to put in a card. But I suppose it’s more of a matter of deciding what to choose from the myriad of lines running through your head. This one made me smile. Happy Valentine’s to you. Trev

TVR

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
And the same to you, Trev;-) Tina