Hoof-hearted
By blighters rock
Sun, 21 Jul 2013
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His stare is hoof-hearted
a painfully practised leer
but under those poky glasses
there’s a very wicked sneer.
The smallest of squints
mirror his toxic shame
to unsettle my senses
and deflect his absent blame.
What’s he even doing here
and why’s he looking at me?
He seemed so nice earlier
but that was with Mrs O’Cree.
I feel like screaming
or phoning a friend
his eyes are like needles
fuelled for my end.
But he is a teacher
an upstanding citizen
and I’m just a reader
a tenderfoot denizen.
As I look away for a moment
he gets up to go
back to the classroom
another shaft in his bow.
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This is quite disquieting
This is quite disquieting blighters, but I guess that's the intention. Very assured writing on show here and I'm jealous of the seemingly effortless way you have put a faultless rhyme together AND maintained the seriousness and gravity of the poetry. Brill'.
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I wish I knew what that
I wish I knew what that track was matey, it feels like a road to nowhere or oblivion.
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"Take it down"...? You
"Take it down"...? You mustn't.
If it was good enough to put up, then it's good enough to stay is what I say.
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Don't delete it! I'm not
Don't delete it! I'm not qualified to comment on poetry, but I liked it - especially tenderfoot denizen.
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yeh, I've tried writing a
yeh, I've tried writing a bit of poetry too. Hard work, which didn't work. You make it seem easy.
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This flows seamlessly
This flows seamlessly blighter's - the words fit their rhythm succinctly. The content gives me total discomfort. I adore discomfort.Final line's a cracker.
That cringe thing - I get it badly. Used to shred stuff in embarrassment.Like my first & only novel. Hope you sail out the creative end soon, block feels tedious after a while.
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One to be read aloud eh?
One to be read aloud eh? Even cleverer than it first seems. Funny too.
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Nice one, blighters. Sorry
Nice one, blighters. Sorry to hear about the block. I'd suggest a cure, if I had one. Just got your book, by the way.
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