The Deep Cave Monster
By ecrivan
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“There is a monster that comes out from the deep and roams the woods, catching people as they go about their business in the neighboring villages”.
“You’re talking about Inuit folklore, the native person said. Those figures are from pre-Christian legends!”
“Like the child that was born out of a buffalo skin?”
No that was another legend that had to do with Indians that appeared on a field of buffalo after the animals were killed. They appeared with the same arrows in them that had been used to kill the beasts!
“This has to do with the giant lizard that has come up from a volcanic cone. He was awakened from his sleep”.
This has nothing to do with lizards either! It is a monster from the depths of the forests!
So went the discussion between the two native people each trying to convince the other that they had had the best story to tell and amaze their tribes people.
In the meanwhile they were both being stalked by a stealthy creature that had been hiding among the dens spruce trees where the creatures were normally few. It roared in between their statements and charged towards their campfire. One was caught by total, turning around only to be overtaken by the beast whose head looked like that of a giant lizard all right. There were razor-sharp teeth to match and a long tongue it used to sample the air.
The other shot his spear, which pierced its skin but was soon deflected. He ran away as quickly as he could to escape its massive jaws and puerile salivation.
Back at the village he told his comrades of the encounter he had had with his now diseased friend. A party would go out that night because they believed that is the monster was out during the day, it would be resting in the far cave away from their village.
Five brave men went to explore this long damp cave with a bat infested entrance. There were some bones littered along the floor of the location and upon inspection it was found to be human.
“ Look at these bones,” one native said. “They do not look like anything from a beast!”
“In fact, they are human,” his comrade said.
“Where could they have come from?” “We have had no losses except for Charlie, yesterday!”
“It must come from the neighboring Odilquit village.”
The warriors were hesitant to continue further noticing that the bones were not few and having heard how large the beast was.
They had heard some sounds at the end of the cavern that sounded human.
“Who goes there?” came a monstrous voice.
Their knees shook and forced them all to scramble for shelter behind some rocks.
“If I find you I will reduce you to bones just as your friend.”
They all thought of what they could do to appease the monster that was moving towards them, a slithery movement that scraped some boulders along the way.
Then they remembered the fire they brought with them. All beasts are afraid of flames knowing that it will burn and cause harm. So that was what they did before the face of a monster they could not recognize. It had the face of a lizard alright but the body was lion-like, its tail that of a serpent…they thrust their torches, it screeched but held its position and they fled…
“That was the last we saw of these men and the monster has since not been found’, the elder said. “Perhaps it has passed away”, but there are still sightings of this beast that hunts men during day and night”. Once he tastes the air around you, he will not stop hunting you down!” But if you listen to your elders, no monster will come to harm you!
The children all wrapped themselves up and cuddled near the campfire after hearing of this menace. It had been a night if stories and this one was the most realistic.
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Might want to look into
Might want to look into proper paragraph spacing and possesive nouns. I liked the idea of a monster in pre colonial america though.
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You got me on the word lizard
You got me on the word lizard. This could use a tighen up.
Whose head looked like that of a giant lizard all right, here I would lose the all right, it felt out of place.
The dialogue didn't feel completely natural in places.
But overall this is a good story that held me until the end. Nice one.
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