Waiting for the Rain

By Ray Schaufeld

Mon, 09 Sep 2013
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10 comments
 
Rain   coming hard
So hard
Sheeting down heavily
 
Battering waves
More upon    more upon     more
Driving down like heartbeats that curve round
When reaching
 
Home.
Leaving    arriving
Gushing   flowing     hammering
Rain.
Rain responsive to
Aching    arid     drought
 Drought   gaping      wide and       thirsty
 
Rain      soaking       drenched
 
     Wet
 
Downpour
Pours
      
 
 
       Down
Lowdown       below
Below the
 
midland      belt
 
 
 
(i am an old woman of 56 and i am still waiting for it)
 
Certificate U
Poem
Lost and found
Nature

Comments

Submitted by scratch on

I love it elsie.  The formatting is striking and appropriate.  Really good job here.  I think that there is a tiny typo?:

 
"Rain reponsive (responsive) to"
 

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

So glad you like this, Scratch and yes I shall fix that typo.          Elsie

Submitted by Bee on

I liked the way the rain is falling, dropping all over your poem.

Enjoyed.

Bee

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Many thanks Bee        Elsie

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

A lovely description of enjoying the heavy, beating down rain. We were in a caravan during a couple of very heavy storms last weekend, and it felt very cosy, with a fire on, and watching, hearing the rain thundering down on the caravan roof and all around!
And between times there was lovely sunshine for walks! Rhiannon

 

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Thanks Rhiannonw. How lovely that you had the fire on in your caravan and were able to love both the storms and the sunshine.       Elsie

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

A very original poem Elsie, it really conveys the relentlessness of heavy rain.

Linda

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Many thanks Linda and I am glad you enjoyed it. If you have a spare minute to read it again please do. It is a poem that is meant to be understood by any one of any age which is why I have given it a U rating. It is also a poem that could be read in more than one way by an adult...

Elsie

 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

I did wonder, Elsie....You're never too old!

Linda

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on