Lost in the Flood (I.P.)

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Sat, 08 Feb 2014
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Hey, man, did you see that? 
 
His body hit the street with such
a beautiful thud. I wonder what
the dude was saying, or was he just
lost in the flood?  Bruce Springsteen
 
After...when we’d stopped, he showed me
photos he’d took  of hundreds; bridges
had always been his obsession, he said.
 
The one – led to nowhere sticks
in my mind;
 
‘Make love, not war’, daubed in mauve paint,
both sides of its crippled, red-brick arches. 
 
Above us, as we sat there, the sky drifted by; 
cirrus, cumulus, nimbus stratus.  Stories
from far-off climes, regaled in foreign tongues.  
 
Behind us – the highway; lorries lumbered by
tail lights snaking, helplessly into the jaws
of a famished night. 
 
Below us, a river.  God knows what its name was.
Daedalian, though, in its beauty.
 
Like us, just passing through...mindlessly flowing 
from this place to that.
 
Glimpsed an otter; its coat...each hair,
bristling, drinking in the dwindling light.
 
I said I really ought to head on home.  
My folks would worry, if I was late.  A lie;
wishful thinking, more like, but what the heck. 
 
 I was bushed, and that was good enough for him.
 
Asked if he’d be alright.  Couldn’t have given
a shit, one way or another, honestly. 
 
Had done my good Samaritan bit, but quite why
he’d chosen here, the back of beyond, to be dropped off, 
I never imagined.
 
In the distance – clouds on the horizon, billowed,
blossomed, in a way no weatherman could ever
have comprehended.
 
As I drove away, I wondered if it was far...
that bridge...those arms reaching out – never
to touch their counterpart, ached to hold him... 
 
sated, soft, and sleeping.
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Comments

Submitted by Jewel Serpent on

Beautiful, cloud-like imagery. Left me floating. I especially liked the sentence about the otter,,, 'bristling, drinking, in the dwindling light'. The words in that sentence just sound s very good together!

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Well thank you, Jewel Serpent, and speaking of words sounding good, I like the namesmiley

Hope you weekend is a good one.

Tina

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

Hit me like a brick wall. You string the delicacy of clouds with the shocking cut of suicide beautifully. Never thought I'd say that. What juxtaposition, Tina.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Again, your words set my senses reeling, Vera, and I thank you for them.

Tina

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Once more first off the mark, dear Tina, and what a corker! I can't say you surpassed yourself because your poetry is always of the highest standard but this is something else, so descriptive and plaintive and the use of that adjective 'daedalian' is superb; so apt and much more expressive than labyrinthine. Well done.

Luigi xxx

 

 

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Many thanks, Luigi.  Words...amazing things, aren't they? So pleased you liked this, and I really do appreciate your taking time out to tell me.

As always, I shall look forward to reading your contribution to this week's IP.  You always have such good and colourful ideas.

Hope you have a peaceful weekend, and don't forget to hang on to that hat, what with all this wind,

and allsmiley

Tina xxx

 

Submitted by prettyrose on

smileyHi Tina, I hope your well! well deserved cherries!!yes

 

Really brilliant has always!! and words entwine beautifully together well done.

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks for reading, Prettyrose.  Glad you enjoyed, and I'm fine thank you, as I hope you aresmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

This poem had a film like quality to it...giving rise to the thoughts of the characters within the poem.

Very much enjoyed Tina.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, Jenny.  Your thoughts, as ever, are more than interesting, and I do see what you meansmiley

Tina