Symmetry

Cherry

By Bee

Mon, 15 Jun 2015
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21 comments
 

After initial acceptance,

apprehension rears an ugly head.



How can one be brave 

when fear has grabbed both hands



and dragged her down

the mirrored halls of chaos? Symmetry, 



mildly valued in the past, will be replaced, 

with shock. Scars will flash 



back who she was -

who thought the balance of flesh the least



important aspect of herself. One is shallower 

than once hoped, and disconcerted to know it. 

Certificate 12
Poem
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I think they used to say about wartime, that pretending not to feel fears, isn't bravery.

One is shallower than once hoped, and disconcerted to know it. is so telling of how we continue to learn more about ourselves. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks for that Rhiannon - especially the last part of your comment.

Bee

Submitted by love_writing on

Brave, honest, vivid and direct. 

I found this line particularly moving; 'Symmetry, mildly valued in the past will be replaced, with shock. 

 

love_writing

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks LW. Glad that line came out ok. 

Bee

Submitted by tibi popovici on

"How can one be brave 
when fear has grabbed both hands

and dragged her down
the mirrored halls of chaos? Symmetry"

Find this an astonishing piece - for representing symmetry.

But, It's so sad..., no one should prove his bravery, ever!

Only good thoughts to you, Bee!

T.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks T.

Bee

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Hi Bee, hope you're doing ok. You are writing straight from your centre here and with great clarity and profundity. For me this piece triggered little physiological reactions; felt the little hairs stand up. Wonderful writing. 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jane. That's helped me to know if the writing worked. 

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Dear Bee...as you know already, your words hit 'home' for me, as far as my precious daughter is concerned, and the lines on 'symmetry', especially so.

'Scared is what you're feeling. Brave is what you're doing'.

Hats off to you.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so very much for reading this, Tina. I don't feel one bit brave, but what you said at the end of your comments is really nice and an encouraging way of looking at things, and something I'll difinitely pass on to others in this all too common situation. 

Bee

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Wonderfully moving, you bring us to the core of this experience.  This has the effect of illumination but also gives comfort that somehow we are not alone in the dark place of change.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much, Philip. 

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you editor for reading, and for the cherries.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Another profound and beautiful piece for your collection. You say what others are afraid to say, and sometimes are even afraid to hear.

Jean

 

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean. 

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Your words are an example to us all. Facing fear, but not letting it bring you to your knees is hard, but so important for survival. I doubt you are a shallow person, but I know how self analysis can ask tough questions.

Whatever happens, I hope you come through. When you do; you may not think it, but you will be a more complete person.

XXX K

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you so much, Keith. 'Facing fear and not letting it bring you to your knees...' I've been mulling that over.

Bee

Submitted by VeraClark on

A self analytical piece shot through with shattering fact and an overt sense of perception. It encourages reader participation - contemplation. I believe that we're not meant to feel brave whilst we're being brave. We just crack on with intrepid fear in our hearts. You are braver than it all.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Vera, your belief is amazingly comforting, relieving us of responsibility, but to go on,

Bee

Submitted by RJF on

This is breathtaking Bee, simply breathtaking. Rxx

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks for reading, R.

x

Bee