Solstice

Cherry

By Philip Sidney

Fri, 26 Jun 2015
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16 comments
 

The sun has stretched the day as far as it can

and another year has passed,

we must roll down the hill toward dark night,

colour flashing on each rotation

blue, gold, green,

press your face into the scented cool of grass

turn, look up and wonder at what lies

beyond that opaque screen,

the ancient rock tumbling through infinity

in a place you do not exist,

cannot be thought of,

but you are here

so touch the earth, feel

air, colour, warmth

with each revolution

momentum

spinning us closer 

to austere

certainty.

Certificate 12
Poem
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

very nice interpretation of the IP - well done!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

The sun has stretched the day as far as it can   and another year has passed, – liked that. Much to think about in the rest. The future can be rich, but may need personally to go through austerity first. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Thanks both :)

Thanks for the cherries.

Submitted by rayjones on

Elegant assessment of everything, succinct yet moving, wonderful wording Ray  

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

smileyThank you so much Ray. 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Helen

What a beautiful poem. I love the idea of the world rolling along with the various colours changing and merging together. You make the future seem so positive.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Thanks Jean :)

Submitted by love_writing on

Beautiful. Made me feel all warm inside - like a child doing a roly-poly down a hill :) 

love_writing

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

"we must roll down the hill toward dark night,"...

true, but kinda sad...

delightful poem!

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Great first statement and lovely, sparing, poem.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Ooops... almost missed this one in the colours of my spin closer to austere certainty. Worth every cherry I believe. As always with your works, I enjoyed the pleasure of the read.  yes

Submitted by scratch on

Something more in this, especially so to the end.

 

Submitted by Pat G on

We are, we are

spinning closer to austere certainty.  I love the sentiment and fine crafting of this piece, with its subtle rhyme pattern and its vortex shape. One I'll read and think about over and over.

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Thank you all for the lovely comments. smiley

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I felt like you were tripping through time with this poem. The Soltice and what lies ahead is a real mystery, taking the reader through a kalidascope of poetic words.

Very much enjoyed reading.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Thanks for reading Jenny, so glad you enjoyed it.