To Pluto – and Back! (Poetry Monthly)

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 17 Jul 2015
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for children

I look through the window and what do I see?
my home town appears through the smoke, as it clears,
and the houses grow small as away they all fall,
the countryside sinking, a map spread out, shrinking;
then jewels are littering the blackness and glittering.    
Descending quite soon on the dust of the moon,
the peaks standing stark on a sky that is dark;
again we ascend and our journey extend
(imagining lots of cartoons – join the dots –
in the big starry dome!), and we suddenly come
close to Mars, reddish planet – don’t stop, land upon it,
through rocks we manoeuvre, reach Jupiter, then further
to Saturn (which has rings like those jumping ball things),
then fly-past Uranus, and Neptune, and last
(and yes, least) in this visiting feast
the planet they scorn – tiny Pluto;
about-turn,
and I’m glad to head home – a wonderful roam
these marvels to see, but the best place to be
is our earth, oh, so suitable for the weather is bearable,
though problems abound they’re far less than are found
in those beautiful places I saw.

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I hope Luigi doesn't mind, but this is quite different I think to his Pluto verse, and it was in the making before he brought our attention to the news about Pluto. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

I love an underdog planet like Pluto. Though, like you, I'd rather gaze on it than be on it. lol. Fun read. Thanks, Rhiannonw.

Rich

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Rich, glad you enjoyed! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Why should I mind, Rhiannon? I haven't the monopoly on news items. It is only natural to be inspired by topics that we hear or read.
And reading about the voyage of New Horizons to Pluto was exactly what prompted me to write that nonsense doggerel. Your verse is quite different and charming.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Luigi, just wanted to refer to your writing on Pluto visit too! 'Charming' is a nice word. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Loved this, I'm going to read it to the kids when they get here later this afternoon.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Bee, glad you liked it, and hope you enjoy your time with the kids. Kids love the idea of roaming around the planets, but then we all do – as long as we don't have to go there to stay! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

Such fun to read this - I like the way their is an internal rhyme scheme. And again very topical and informative.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean, glad you enjoyed. warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Rhiannon, we can always rely on you to write something topical, informative and fun, as of course we can - dear Luigi.  

So very much enjoyed this, and I'm really glad you posted it.smiley

Toma

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, thank you, Tina, so glad you found it fun. I find if I write something successfully fun for children it's usually enjoyed by all ages! warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Hi Rhiannon, I tried before to post a comment on this piece, but for some reason it wouldn't accept it and just refused to set. I wanted to say that I thought this was an excellent adventure for little ones to grasp the basic structure of our solar system, Just enough time and mention of each planet to hold their interest and a quick trip back down to the familiarity they have of earth. I visualize a group of 5s or under having a wonderful debate on the merits of space travel through their own interpretation and experience of the poem. smiley

Nicely done, it could inspire far more than just fun - take care... Rob

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thank you, Art, for your thoughtful feedback and appreciation. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

Great poem... and just amazing to think that we can actually peer 'down' on Pluto as we fly beyond the solar system!!!

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Terry, glad you enjoyed this. As for flying beyond, I think I'd want to get back to earth for tea, but we can do so much in imagination! Rhiannon