little Hiroshima in my head

Cherry

By celticman

Mon, 20 Jul 2015
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Little Hiroshima in my head.

Up in the air

Single self fractures and disintegrates

Leaving life too late

Making rubble of the past

A future that will not last

Peering into a twilight

When life’s blown apart

Remember the name

It’ll come to me again

It begins with an ah-ah-ah

-who am I again?

Life dissembled line by line

Vertigo- rushing to and fro – vertigo

Safe ground slides away

A solitary soldier saluting

Eyes right

Enter and whole worlds disappear

Lost with geography

Language but sharp

Slips and clips

Things have springs and locks

Space flattens

Dis-ease

Un-couple

Non-sense – 

Certificate PG
Poem
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Comments

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

This is the first piece I have read of yours Jack and to be honest I'm glad that I've left it so long - habit dictates that I leave the best till last and thus not measure the works of others by the perfection of the few. Now I understand why you are held in such esteem and know that I will surely savor the words within a new book penned by this author. Thank you for your talent and inspiration. Take care... Rob

Submitted by celticman on

thanks Rob, I'd guess I'm held in such esteem because I've been here longest. I must admit to writing as much rubbish as the next man (or woman), but I'd also guess I've lucked in that it's the first you've read and you like it so much. appreciated, jack 

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

The devastating effects of dementia/brain injury explained so well with this metaphor.

Submitted by celticman on

 cheers ps.

 

Submitted by love_writing on

Very nicely done CM.

'Vertigo- rushing to and fro- vertigo'  this line is so effective - makes me feel dizzy reading it :) 

love_writing

Submitted by Bee on

I felt the disconnection reading this. Very well done.

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Wish, to those ubiquitous stars and back, that this didn't make quite so much sense to me.

Tina

 

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

Disequalibrium of the mind told with emotional distance. Powerful.

 

Submitted by EB on

You tell it like it is. 

Submitted by celticman on

thanks to the dizziness and the disconnects, the shame is too manyof us (as Tina reminds us) know how this goes.