The little white box

Gold cherry
Story of the week

By love_writing

Sun, 19 Jul 2015
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15 comments
 

Thank you so much everyone for encouraging feedback on this one, I really appreciate it. It's off for submission now :)

Certificate 15
Story
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Comments

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Nice one LW... kept me fixed on the page for all the time you knew that I would be!  smiley

Thanks for sharing the emotional rollercoaster - I think I squeezed my laptop too hard at the sight of a child missle passing through a windscreen angry - it left a puddle on my desk!  Take care.... Rob

Submitted by love_writing on

Thanks Rob! I hope your laptop is ok!  Appreciate the read and comment :)

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Submitted by love_writing on

Thanks eds for cherries :)

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Submitted by celticman on

haywire formatting, makes hay when the screen shines. There's a darkness about this and your protagonsit's struggle to get somewhere he doesn't want to go but doesn't know how to say no, sheds light on that. 

 

Submitted by love_writing on

Thanks celticman....yes his guilt makes him go back. I agree it's a dark piece it started off as a character study of a man in an airport and this is where it led to! 

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Submitted by london_calling79 on

I couldn't read the end of this which is testament to the build up and to the shock factor. Can't believe I missed it first time round - fantastic piece of writing and a deserved pick.

 

Submitted by love_writing on

Thank you lc...I'm in shock that its been picked! Congratulations to you too and your pick of week!   

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Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Clever structure, really adds to the shattered emotions and tension.  Always interesting to consider strangers in public places.  Great read.

Submitted by love_writing on

Thank you philip! This story started as an observation of a man in airport and this is where it led too...Glad you thought the structure worked - I was worried about that!

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Submitted by love_writing on

Wow....I'm in shock! Thank you so much!! I wasn't too sure if this one was too risky with the format etc...so I am very chuffed that it's been picked. That's the best birthday present ever!

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Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

this is a brilliant pick - happy birthday love-writing!

 

Submitted by love_writing on

Thank you insert!...for birthday wish too :) 

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Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Intense and well done, LW. Congrats on pick of the week.

Rich

 

Submitted by love_writing on

Thank you Rich, that's lovely to hear :) 

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Submitted by love_writing on

Thank you Rich, that's lovely to hear :) 

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