So Black Beauty
By blighters rock
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‘She’s lost her bloody phone again
out on a hack this time,’ she said.
‘It’ll turn up,’ I said,
But she was having none of it
Just a scornful look of shame.
So I imagined a handsome young man
Out in the earliest of crisp mornings.
Spooked by a playful deer
Tumbling from his horse
What did he find but her phone.
Riding like the wind
Jumping ramshackle fences
And diving into valleys with the risen sun
He screamed joy for the excuse
To approach the girl at the stables.
Suitably satisfied
And soothed by the music from Black Beauty
Playing in my head
I can’t help wishing that this hardworking girl
Might meet the man of her dreams.
‘It’s gone for good this time,’ her mum says.
‘It’ll turn up’, I say.
A few days later
The young lady hears news from school
She’s flunked out big time on her AS results
And needs to retake the whole year
But she doesn’t seem to mind.
She’s mucked out all summer at the stables
Helping to pay her way for Alfie
But only a week ago the doctor told her
She’s anaemic
But she doesn’t seem to care much
Takes everything in her stride.
Out come the steaks and spinach
The carrots and sweetcorn
Mum saying it’s her fault for not feeding her up
But there’s news, her daughter says,
As if it meant nothing
‘The phone was found by Josh on a hack’.
Trotting through Albury Heath with his trusty steed
A young couple madly in love
Asked if he knew anyone who’d lost a phone
And so he remembered his friend at the stables
And took charge of it for her.
‘Sounds like the man of your dreams,’ I said.
‘D’uh,’ she replied, ‘he’s gay.’
With my plan foiled I wondered
‘I still think you should hang out with him’
and her mum flung her head back with laughter
‘Oh sweets, you’re such a dreamer.’
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Excellent
This is an excellent piece, Blighters. I had to have a bit of patience with it (sometimes not my strongest quality) but it was worth it. A prose poem dressed in lyrical clothes and that sets it apart from the crowd. Tremendously well rendered relationships here with no less than 7 individuals interplaying - excluding the horse - and each revealing more about the others than themselves. That's difficult to do and keep it as lite as this. Cap's doffed.
PS. you need an 's' in 'AS reults'
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Enjoyed reading - for the
Enjoyed reading - for the story, and the poem.
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Nicely done and carries with
Nicely done and carries with ease all the bones of a well fruited short story. Thanks for sharing... take care.
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