Castles in the Air (Poetry Monthly)

By luigi_pagano

Tue, 20 Oct 2015
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The prediction was
that he would go far
because he was born
under a lucky star.

He grew up showing
that he wasn’t a fool;
outsmarted all kids
when he started school.

Lego houses he built
were said to be perfect;
his parents were sure
he’d be an architect.

Could not be a singer
(his voice was soprano)
so he turned his hands
to playing with Meccano.

To be a budding mechanic
maybe was his vocation.
But whatever he did
would enthral the nation.

When reality occurred
all his dreams crumbled;
he flunked his exams
and his pride was humbled.

Although he had talent
and showed  great flair
all the roads that he took
seemed to lead nowhere.

But he did go far,
because he was a survivor;
he drove long distances
as a... lorry driver.

© Luigi Pagano 2015

Certificate U
Poem
Humour

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

So he found those road to somewhere, and plenty of them! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

So long as they are not as crumbling as his dreams, Rhiannon. He's only hoping of a smooth ride.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I forgot to say that comments and constructive criticism are welcome. Thank you.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Luigi,

loved the rhyme within this poem. The little lad had many dreams, and being a lorry driver is a great way to earn a living, out on the open road. My partner's a truck driver and loves his job.

Great to read your work again.

Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hello Jenny. At a young age boys fantasise of becoming engine drivers, astronauts, firemen and all sort of occupations but end up doing something different when they grow up.
Some choose sedentary jobs; others, like your partner, prefer a more active life on the open road. All require a specific skill but the main thing is to enjoy one's work.
Glad you liked the rhyme and the pun too I hope.

Luigi xx

 

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Made me smile, Luigi.  An original and delightful, take on the promptsmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hi Tina, a jokey poem intended to raise a smile which seemed to have achieved its purpose at least in your case. Thanks for letting me know.

Luigi xxx

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

A fun pieces fun piece, Luigi. Last line got me.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I am so pleased that you enjoyed this, Ray. Thanks for your encouraging remark.
I may be mistaken but it looks to me as if humourous pieces are not well regarded by our readers and preference is given to more serious writing. I will try, but can't promise,  to use more gravitas in future.
Is there a new (Poetry Monthly) topic for November yet?

Luigi x

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

Tomorrow now Luigi, tomorrow.