Ensnared

By Rhiannonw

Thu, 10 Mar 2016
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15 comments
 

Enticing coyly,
words cloying, oily,
teasing, easing,
sleazily seizing,
trickles of tickly tricking,
trapping
with sugary wrapping,
sweetly lulling,
senses dulling,
sedating
– conscience
unconscious
of guile,
dozing,
losing
awareness
of danger,
and unfairness:

shake up!
wake up!

Certificate U
Poem
Families
Philosophy

Comments

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

I really like the structure here, the slow reeling in and the jolt at the end. 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Helen, I'm glad it came over like that. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Weefatfella on

The word play is excellent. Not only does the rhythm catch you. the hook at the end does as well.

There yie are.

Weefatfella.

I might not like what you say but I will defend to the death your right to say it.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, there were so many suitable and similar words to give the feel! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Wonderful play on words / with sounds that gradually morph throughout until the end, ensnared, indeed.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Bee. It drew you in! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

It did.

X

Bee

Submitted by hilary west on

Hi,

This draws us into your web, Rhiannon, and what a wonderful web it is !

Best Wishes,

HW

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, thanks, Hilary. A web of wise thought not trickery hopefully! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Cleverly done Rhiannon, I too liked your poem.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jenny. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

I really enjoyed the way you played with the words. And the sentiment with the sweet item enticing one is very true in my experience.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean. I appreciate your comment. It started in my mind about flirting, but felt it was something of wider application. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by london_calling79 on

Those g endings just drip seductively down the page. Enjoyed this.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, LC, I hoped the word play would make the point, and it seems it did, in one way or another! Rhiannon