Embarrassment!

By Rhiannonw

Thu, 29 Sep 2016
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8 comments
 

Do you know the story
of Thomas and the mine?
the roof broke, he fell in, because
he’d disobeyed the sign.

His pride thought he knew better,
he shook his driver off
– triumphantly he went right past,
and thought it quite a laugh.

The ground gave way, and down he went,
the rails collapsed, and sagged.
Soon Thomas was remembering,
regretted how he’d nagged,

and ragged old Gordon earlier    
reminding of  his own
fall into dirty ditchwater
– if only he had known …

‘I am a silly engine’. ‘Yes,
and naughty, you will need
to wait’, the Fat Controller said,
‘by Gordon you’ll be freed’.

Two engines who’d been cocky,
before a silly tumble,
had learnt to listen to advice
and be a bit more humble!

‘Before his downfall a man’s heart is proud’ Proverbs 18:12, in the Bible

[IP: Before the Fall]

 

Certificate U
Poem
Families
Children's
Humour
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Wise message told in this little tale within your poem Rhiannon, loved the idea, especially as it's about Thomas the tank engine. I used to sit and watch the programme with my son when he was young.

Enjoyed reading.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. Glad you enjoyed. When my older children were small, it was only the original Awdry books that were available, but they loved them, just four stories a book I think ,with good pictures, and so gently and with fun, showing the various engines acting irritatbly etc and then regretting it and making friends, and being more considerate and happy etc. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

I like this a lot Rhiannon, not the least because Thomas is loved by many children on the autistic spectrum. My severely disabled cousin age 21 still uses Thomas items. And you have created a good tale too!

Linda

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Linda. That is interesting – my youngest who had Asperghers' certainly was very attached to the Thomas stories, models, trains of all kinds as well as music - and still is! But all my childrean appreciated the stories a lot, and we collected all the original ones I think, bit by bit. (Of course, the story here is, closely I hope, based on Awdry's original - I was able to check it out on YouTube, as now all our Awdry books have been taken to their own homes!) Rhiannon

 

Submitted by hippie girl on

feels like a real thomas story thanks...

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, glad you enjoyed, hippie girl. 'Thomas down the mine' and 'Gordon falls in the ditch' are real Thomas stories - I refreshed my memory by looking them up on YouTube! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

My grandson is a big Thomas fan. I will read this to him when he next comes, to see if he can remember that particular story.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, Thanks Jean, I hope he understands it and enjoys it. He would probably remember Gordon falling into the ditch too, and Thomas's ragging him about it! Rhiannon