Who am I

By hedgehog1

Thu, 31 Aug 2017
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As the tree-tops gently quiver

And silver clouds fly by

Rain clouds ever gather

Over mountains in the sky

Who am I?

Who am I?

 

As the sun breaks through the rain

I open up my eyes

I hear music gently playing

Moving me to rise

Who am I?

Who am I?

 

The gentle breeze awakes the tree

For under there I was set free

Butterflies through glowing leaves

Wipe away my tears and fears

Who am I?

Who am I?

 

My cancer was three years ago

How fast the time does fly

Thank you for believing

As I watch the clouds and sigh

Who am I?

Who am I?

 

 

I don't say I have the gift of sight

To listen to another's plight

But cancer needs a listening hand

To help, encourage and understand

That's who I am

That's who I am

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Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I think the repetition works really well in this poem, thank you for posting it Edward

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

"inter" I was not sure whether the repetition was right for this poem, so thank you for your comment.

Edward

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I liked the level of repetition here too. I also like the phrase 'listening hand' – there can be such a lot of communication through a gentle hand/touch, indicating listening, noticing, understanding, sympathy, concern, encouragement … Rhiannon

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

Thank you Rhiannon for your kind comments, I'm a volunteer at a cancer hospital and part of my remit is to sit and listen to men (usually on their own) who are experiencing problems with the cancer they have. This was the catalyst for this particular poem.

Edward

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

I think therefore I am

I am therefore I do

I do therefore I am

I am -God

Dooby dooby doo -Frank Sinatra

Yeea Yeea Yeea -Beatles

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

Tom very clever to post Rene Descartes je pense, donc je suis in his Discourse on the method. His article is commenly referred to as the "Evil Demon Article" It is only in the Principles that Descartes states the argument in its famous form "I think, therefore I am"

Edward

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Descarte had an atheist opponent who challenged him in the royal court for prove for the queen that God exists. Descarte gave him a note and the man dropped in his tracks right there. No-one else read the note. This is truth save detail although it might have been another famous mathematician.

I think you should know? Tom Brown

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

A listening ear to the suffering. I like how you bring nature into the equation Edward.

I think we become spiritual when faced with the C word.

Thank you for sharing this moving poem.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

 Thank you Jenny for your comments on "Who am I". They are very thoughtful and yes we do become more spiritual when faced with the "C" word.

Edward

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

And I have to assume you cannot tell us what the "C" word is? All these difficult high words on Abc confuses me people just carry on apparently assuming we the reader now all English words and how clever they are. And if you ask they are sarcastic.

Tom Brown

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

I've never been afraid of using the word cancer Tom Brown, but, as a person that has had cancer and attends a cancer clinic to spend quality time with terminally ill cancer sufferers on a regular basis you learn to be sympathetic to the way they speak and confront their cancer. If a person uses the phrase "the big C" or just says they have the "C" I respect that and address them in the manner that they address their cancer. As you might note I did not use anything but the word cancer in my poem so to address your comment in the way you did I find very strange.

Edward 

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

I apologise it does make sense I thought later on that with the religious ideas you were reffering to Jesus. I should not have been so lighthearted you've been very patient.

By the way the anecdote on the mathematician is true.

See you around! Tom Brown

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

Thank you Tom for your apology I knew in my heart you were a man of virtue.

Edward