Trumpeting

Gold cherry

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 31 Mar 2018
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Bare bones stand lifeless, gaunt and sere
– the wood is dark and drear.
Can life return ?– there seems no gleam
of colour or of green.

We leave the wood, and driving past
the grassy verge, a yellow blast
is trumpeting from sparkling gold
that spring is back – its touch behold!

[IP: 50 words, no more, no less]

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Comments

Submitted by Di_Hard on

yellow blast is fantastic, you are clever :0) I have just been listening to the Four Seasons, and Spring sounds just like daffodils the way you describe them here

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

What a lovely comment! Thank you. Writing in metre and yet seeing if one could keep to a set number of words was quite a challenge, but for this piece I wanted to write in metre, and I wanted to see if I could keep to the word count! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

I saw the yellow blast! Indeed it looks as if the green buds will never burst, the wood is dark and drear. lovely little piece Rhiannon. The daffodils have saved spring.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jane. It had been on my mind this contrast driving home and thought to see if it could fit into the IP challenge. I hope you have a good time in Elan? Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I am beginning to think we should make Denzella chief IP setter as this is producing such brilliant results! Spring has been such a long time coming this year hasn't it?  I'm still waiting for the yellow blast in my garden. Happy Easter Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thaks, Insert. Yes, the IP idea is quite a different kind of challenge, and for me it was particularly because I wanted this verse to be in a metre anyway, and found myself at one point at 49 words and realising I need to exchange a 2 syllable word for two one-syllable words, but anyway realised the meaning of one of the lines wasn't clear anyway, and in the end both problems resolved together! Happy Easter to you, and enjoy your daffodils when they arrive! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for the cherries! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

I love the optimism in this, just what I need on what is another cold, wet, grey day!  

Thank you for this Rhiannon - as insert says, the IP is producing some wonderful results.  

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, airy — the daffodils are still bravely shining, though we've lost the bright sunshine we had for some of last week! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

This joyful welcome to spring is a real antidote to the gloom of a prolonged winter - it's our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day! 

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Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for that appreciation, and glad it encourages cheer and expectancy! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Lovely blast of daffs. 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks Elsie! Even on the dull days! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

A lovely touch of Spring in your poem Rhiannon.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. The sunshine seems to have returned today! Rhiannon