Where I Belong

Cherry

By D Marie

Sat, 16 Jun 2018
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5 comments
 

..I am the sea.

I would live and die here

(with grace, as our ancestors did)

                              If I could outswim the spike

                              embedded in my side..

 

I never dived to the depths

hoping to find its secrets.

Nor, when I returned to the surface

did I query the sky.

I was in mystery,

our mothering sea.

She knows where I belong -

do they?

Certificate U
Poem
Historical Fiction
Crime
Nature

Comments

Submitted by london_calling79 on

I loved the poem. Great economy of words. I would only change the title. Personally I like to make the reader work a bit, let’s them invest more of themselves into the writing.

 

Submitted by D Marie on

Hello London_calling79,
I will take your advice on board, thanks.
I like it when I have to think too.

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

How lovely. And also tragic. A wonderful message from a whale. My only thought was the "at" in "query at the sky". Wonderfully balanced rendering.

Parson Thru

Submitted by D Marie on

'did I query the sky'..
Thank you Parson Thru.
Didn't expect a cherry..Lovely start to the day.

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Yes. Without the preposition.

It's a great piece, Dogstails.

Parson Thru