At sea with you

Cherry
Pick of the Month

By caribou_

Sun, 16 Sep 2018
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8 comments
 

I want it to happen again
I want to wade right out 
Into the middle of your life 
No raft, no float, no arm bands

I want to say ‘fuck it’
To go for it, not care 
Dive in and down and under
But I daren't fucking dare

I want to remember the words 
Your teeth sharply on the chain
You floating beneath me
I want it again

I want to take you somewhere
And lie down quietly 
All heart-crashing-waves
Touching-butterfly-lightly

I want to refer to the room
At the start of a well-worn story 
To be able to say ‘I saw her’
‘Now she’s my pride and glory’

To fit it all together
Tide to land and back
To deal with imperfections
Every fissure, every crack

To be that walking cliche
Say ‘fuck it’ and not care
But that other cliche - timing - 
Means I dare not fucking dare.

Certificate 12
Poem
Boys, Girls and Alcohol and Random Things (Poetry)
Romance

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I love this one caribou. It's great that you've put the right age rating on it, but the teaser/preview (which defaults to the first few lines unless you choose otherwise) has to be U rated as it appears on our front page. Could you please change it? To do so, just go into 'edit' and you should see how from there. Any problems do get in touch. Thanks  smiley

 

Submitted by caribou_ on

No worries - I have made it 'U rated' but what about the swearing...?

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

The age rating was fine before - it has to be a 12 because of the swearing. It's just the 'teaser' you need to change - not the poem itself! Go into edit and look for the 'summary' - that's what needs changing so ti's U rated, not the poem itself!

 

Submitted by caribou_ on

Ah, cool, ok - I added the summary just as the first four lines, which has no swearing in, so hopefully it's ok now?

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

That's perfect - thank you!

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is our Poem of the Month - Congratulations!

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

Very, very well done.

Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Caribou,

I thought this was great.  The F word was effectively used.  I wrote a poem shortly after joining ABC. It was terrible I have worked on it since so I might just post it   The f word is mentioned more than once but I wrote it to amuse.  Your's is more serious and well written.  The last line is great.