not ready to fly yet

Gold cherry

By Di_Hard

Thu, 08 Nov 2018
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16 comments
 

cat on the bed looks up

as I go in

 

he lies on the floor

curled as if fallen

like a leaf still

in school uniform

 

the chrysalis of his face

asleep

 

next time I go in  he's on the bed

curled round the cat

both breathing softly

 

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Stephen Thom on

'Chrysalis of his face' is beautiful

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou :0) I wasn't sure about that at all

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

you've captured that special thing (not sure what to call it) that anyone who's ever looked into the room of a sleeping child will experience. Especially if they have cats. Or dogs who think they're a lot smaller than they actually are. Or indeed both!

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou! It is a special thing, isn't it? He moans about his cat (big fluffy ginger and white) going in the middle of his bed, but he doesn't like sleeping without him :0)

Thankyou for the cherries, too!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Yes, a lovely memory to 'catch', both the simple picture and the sudden relaxation of back home after the turmoil of the outer world at that age. I liked the metaphor of 'chrysalis' too.

I've been printing out (large, poor eyesight, very poor hearing) some verses my mother-in-law (99) used to write as she enjoyed little walks etc. She sees her 'nom-de-plume' on them and says oh, she miust have written that, and that she certainly likes it! Can't clearly remember the writing, but the intonation she puts in as she reads, shows the memory of the picture she was wanting to capture is there somewhere. There is also a funny one she wrote about her husband, which has helped when she is inclined to just remember the arguments they had! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Rhiannon, wasn't sure it was enough of a thing to make a poem. But like you are doing with your mother in law, it is good to be remember happy times. It is a lovely thought of yours to do that for her - calling her back to herself with her own "voice"

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

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Please share/retweet if you like it as much as I did

Picture Credit:https://tinyurl.com/yd7suvqk

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Wow! Thankyou !

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Nice, Di. Lovely sentiment and good use of the "J" thing. Great pick.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Parson :0) I'm trying to learn from reading the brilliant poems you write about instants of time which communicate so easily I feel like I was there

What is the J thing?

 

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Beautiful.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Hudsonmoon :0)

 

Submitted by london_calling79 on

Just gorgeous. I am denied this pleasure as my little sods always wake up!

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou LC :0) Sounds like you are being kept on your toes!

when they are asleep is kind of like a raindrop hanging, so fragile and perfect, then they wake up SPLASH :0)

 

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Soft and beautiful, I love the description of your child as a fallen leaf and his precious relationship with an animal. Those moments are the best life has to offer.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Jane, yes he is an only child and his cat is very precious to him. It's lovely seeing the cat with an arm over him :0)