Bog Brilliance

Gold cherry

By Rhiannonw

Thu, 23 May 2019
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11 comments
 

Dark and dank and waterlogged  –
soggy bog-land –
secluded haunt of otter shy,
sheltered from intrusions idle
– sunshine flag gives indication,
– signal bright: no invitation
to wander pleasantly up yonder,
no ease of rambling way,
on borders’ solid pathway stay,
lamp of warning
marsh edge adorning:
enjoy my lemon brilliance,
my beauty as a sentinel intense.

[Yellow flag iris]

 

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Beautiful poem about one of my favourite flowers. I just love the leisurely pace of meanderings in this piece.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. It was a beautfiul sight shining out against that dark bogland water.Rhiannon

 

Submitted by queen beatle on

Gorgeous as always, Rhiannon - a golden delicious

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

So glad you thought so!  and thank you for letting me know! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Beauty in the bog - a touch of gold to light the dark.  This is our facebook and twitter pick of the day - do share.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you. I like that comment, and pleased about POD of course for the lily by the bog! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I love this! You are brilliant.

The ogg sounds are like water filled footprints, sucking at the rhythm

Then "idle" mixed with the "S" of secluded makes me think of intruders sliding off, like in fairy tales, the place magically invisible to them.

"Sunshine flag" is perfect, using their name and also how they look, I LOVE the idea of a flag being made out of sunshine :0)

All of it. "My beauty as a sentinel intense" as PS says, makes me think of the yellow shining out over distances.

It is GORGEOUS, a brilliant choice for pod, a wonderful read, thankyou

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you so much again, Di, and very glad you enjoyed. It is surprising how many sounds in words can be a bit onomoatpoeic. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Lovely piece Rhiannon. I enjoyed the way you describe their beauty in yellow shades and also how you point out that they serve as a warning to the water's edge often hidden, I'd never thought of them like that. They are a very classy plant.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jane. They were certainly beautiful in that natural environment, and contrasting with the darkness, but seclusion of the boggy area for shy creatures. And I thought the warning for us, is beneficial for those creatures who want a secluded quiet place too! Rhiannon