The Sky

By Richard L. Provencher

Sun, 26 Jan 2020
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is a tenor in an

orchestra of music

its proud evening shades

of sunshine dropping

as  notes in a soliloquy

during twilight.

 

The nearby farm

family in prayer

supper’s on the table

potatoes & chicken

breast the main attraction.

 

All is well in the

countryside

snow banks a reasonable

height – barn keeping

out the snow

and fence posts holding

strong in the wind.

 

 

Certificate U
Poem
Easy Living
Nature

Comments

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

Dear Readers, I am not quite satisfied with my first line in the above poem -- any suggestions?

Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Did you mean the whole metaphor of the first stanza, Richard? I couldn't suggest any change. I was puzzled at first at the metaphor, - why 'tenor' and then I thought, well, I suppose 'bass' would be like the darker shades of night, so tenor does seem rather apt for the evening shades, and describing the changing shades as a soliloquy.

I think you will have to leave it settling in your mind, and see if you find anything you want to clarify later! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

You confirm my first feelings, Rhiannonw -- thank you.. 

Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Nolan on

Thank God I'm a country boy!