I've forgotten

By monodemo

Fri, 21 Feb 2020
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8 comments
 

I’ve forgotten

The pain

I’d get in my head

 

I’ve forgotten

The times

I wished myself dead

 

I’ve forgotten

My mother

Feeding me my dinner

 

I’ve forgotten

Me never

Feeling like a winner

 

I’ve forgotten

The scars,

How they got there

 

I’ve forgotten

My life

How I’m still here

 

I remember

Waking up

In a hospital bed

 

I remember

My parents

Standing over my head

 

I remember

Hoping that

I’m going to survive

 

I remember

My promise

To keep myself alive

Certificate PG
Poem
2020
Drama

Comments

Submitted by onemorething on

I like the idea of this. I like the repetition and I like the stark lines. :) 

 

Submitted by monodemo on

why thank you onemorething. i appreciate the feedback

 

Submitted by drew_gummerson on

Yes. I agree. And that it has a positive ending. 

 

Submitted by monodemo on

thank you drew. 

all the feedback is very helpful

Submitted by rosaliekempthorne on

I like the rhythm this has, and the kind of inspirational note that it finishes on, which is built up towards over the course of the poem.

Submitted by monodemo on

 

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Submitted by monodemo on

thank you rosalie. 

i really appreciate the feedback