Oh Sweet Lullaby

By Richard L. Provencher

Tue, 03 Mar 2020
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Esther my own precious dear

when you tarry then sally near

there is nothing but my heart to fear

for as I tread forth in silence

along the path where willows breathe

all I feel are gilded gifted thoughts

that pass beyond any borders

in my mind and I am no longer

alone on a journey that soars divine

since together as lovers we are at last.

 

 

Certificate PG
Poem
Easy Living
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Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

 

Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Tom Brown on

The free ryme is beautiful it is always so much more natural than fixed patterns, that is better left to the masters.

Your sentiments are wonderful Richard! Tom

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

Thank you so much, Tom, for your positive comments. I wrote this poem for my wife, Esther. She will be married to me 45 yrs. on March 27, this yr. To a recent question of yours -- I began writing for our young grand kids and our own children, all of whom were male and since much of my content included my own thoughts, it was easier to write about males. But as per your suggestions I have stretched myself to now include females in my stories and poems. It enhances my writing challenges.    RE FREE STYLE -- for me it is my writing niche and as you can see I use no commas in my poetry. That way  my readers can allow the sentence flow better. Cheers. 

Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Yes I have noticed Richard and it makes a lot of sense. You leave the pauses and stops, feelings and nuances over to the reader it makes everything much more natural and fluent. The interpretations are lot more flexible as such.

The capitals too it sounds stupid starting each line with a capital letter but it has been traditional in poetry since how long ago. You know what you just ended the line now you start with the next one, you don't need something else as well. Really it is very artificial and is unnecessary.

How then about dropping that final and only full-stop too! And not a bad thing actually writing about boys and men most of us just want to write about girls and women. You know how one-track minded we are hey?

You're doing very well! Tom Brown

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

Thank you for your insights.

Richard L. Provencher