time flies

Cherry

By Di_Hard

Tue, 25 May 2021
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Bodies irridescent

as minds in the present

can hold places we've been

in Future's oily sheen,

while frail wings blister space,

fizz with repulsive grace,

or  land, speed divesting

to catch rainbows resting;

 

but Peace symbol they're not,

for survive on our rot -

"All bad except for us!" -

surrender's susurrus.

Their exploring touch is

soft as an eyelash kiss,

lazily taking time 

(apathy's gentling crime)

 

comforting, in a way -

intimite, you might say -

as flies are born knowing

where all of Life's going,

so wait while we juggle

evidence, struggle

to keep Hope alive, yet

all our progress is debt

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Comments

Submitted by marandina on

".. surrender's susurrus.." Some great lines here, Di. Super poem.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much! It's a bit bleak

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Sorry, you've lost me in these, Di! Though, as far as the ending is concerned, my hope isn't in what mankind can/might/won't achieve, but a certainty stated for a future definite and good to be installed by God, before too long. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou very much for reading and your helpful comment, Rhiannon. Have tried to make it clearer but will leave it now, think it should be deleted as so negative

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

There is a personal message in this poem I feel. You've created a poem that suggests to me a fear of a broken world that you struggle to come to terms with.

I've probably got the poem completely wrong, but I think the lines:-

Why are they here?

Drawn to dead things

they wait while I struggle

to keep Hope alive for us

to change before we can't

I get the feeling this is about birds being attracted to the rubbish of the beaches and oceans and your worry of them dying.

Sorry if I've got completely wrong what you are trying to say, but I know there's some message behind your words.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

:0) I am glaf if you think here is a message! You are very kind to try to make sense of it, thankyou!

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Not really romantic. Guess one can't write only about love all the time . .. .

Cheers, Tom

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Not romantic AT ALL  :0) Thankyou very much for reading and commenting, though I am sorry it was disappointing!

 

Submitted by Nolan on

Like your title very descriptive. Well not quite so sure they say beauty is through the eyes of the beholder. Yes and it's brave to write about fies for once it's just love, love, luve all the time rose coloured glasses.

God created all creatures everything that live is holy. Well anyway I'm sure I did understand it all it's really not that hard.

Nolan &

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much Nolan for your great comment. I agree, all creatures are Holy