Turn of the year ’scape

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 31 Dec 2021
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19 comments
 

Scrawny trees
stark on pale clear sky
tangled twigs and
mistletoe orbs;
jaded damp sodden turf,
wintery stillnes
’til sudden stormy shake
of blasting gale,
dark clouds
and lashing showers …
quiet skies again.

Certificate U
Poem
Countryside explorations
Nature

Comments

Submitted by donignacio on

I like the imagery in this one. Nice and concise... I like it!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Good to know. Thank you! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I felt colder reading this! Very glad to be inside :0)

 I liked "scrawny" with "stark",

and "shake" at the end of the line with the added buffets of repeated "a" sounds in "gale" and "lashing".

And then you end with an echo of "scrawny" in "again" it's so clever! So much seemed to have happened in so few words

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Di, again. You have such an ear for analysing sounds in verse, thank you. I'm not always aware why I like a certain choice of words to convey what I'm wanting to say! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Really enjoyed this skillfull word picture, thank you. It's been positively spring-like here, but yours is more usual for this time of year. Happy New Year! 

typo: stillness

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you! Actually I wasn't thinking so much of temperature, though the wind on the hill was tremendous yesterday afternoon, but yet failry mild, but still the stillness (out of the wind) and the sihouettes of the trees, and the tiredness of the grass (though in some placess even that is looking unusually lush).

A happy new year to you too. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries, brightening the landscape! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Turlough on

Hello Rhiannon.

Your poem is a perfect description of what I see when I walk down the lane to our village. 

The words

jaded damp sodden

work so well together to describe the atmosphere at this time of year. 

I really enjoyed reading this and I wish you a happy New Year.

Turlough

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, and I wish you and yours  a happy new year too.

It is lovely when the air is clear, the sky bright, interesting cloudscapes and light through them, and of course the sparkles of sun on frost or snow some days! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

You've captured the starkness and beauty of winter in this poem Rhiannon.

A striking example, descriptive of the view from our back bedroom window.

Hope your New Year is Healthy and Happy.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. Glad you enjoyed, and that you have a view to watch! I hope your new year is happy and healthy too. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Wintry!

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Exactly! thanks. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

Beautifully done. Such precision with your words. Happy New Year to you, Rhiannon. Paul

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, and a happy new year to you too. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

I did like the immediacy of this - the sudden arrival of the storm and then the quiet again. And the 'mistletoe orbs' is such an evocative phrase. You took me right there.

Happy New Year, Rhiannon.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

ThanIk you, and I hope your new year is happy too. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

what a lovely poem to the new year.  Thank you for your comments on my last post. You are right about the bridesmaids being related to the groom.  I will change it when I get my computer wowrking again. I am using my son's at the moment.

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jean. Sorry about your computer problems. I've been getting out a bit walking at last. There've still been difficulties that that op didn't seem to address. I've kept occupied and happy in the Lord's care, but would like to have full health, greater usefulness, and freedom to be out in the countryside more again! Rhiannon