Kay Too

There's a good dramatic construction to this, though I think you occasionally overuse adjectives a little. For instance in the phrase "Your latent fragrance seeps from / Beneath the silken flesh I paw at," the adjectives steal attention from each other and one of them ends up losing power. Other times they just seem unnecessary ("delicate" is a bit predictable for "collar bone"). Nothing that can't be improved with some practice though. Something else - the poem is composed of seven stanzas, four with five lines and three central ones with four lines. The fact that they're all so close to each other means that the change from five to four and back to five is a little jarring. I normally don't point these things out when it comes to free verse, but a poem like this is just begging to be given a more regular number of lines per stanza (either consistently five or consistently four). I wouldn't go out of my way to alter this specific piece (it's already complete), but for the future give a shot at keeping your stanzas consistent in size - either that, or go the other way round and use more variety in the number of lines, so that we're not led to expect regularity at the beginning only to find a change mid-way. It's an evocative poem anyway, keep it up. Ciao!

I really liked the way it startde and then lost it - possibly because of the change in stanza length but also because it moved from the small and intimate to the vast and intimidating. I think it's almost a very good poem indeed if that's not too much faint praise - I mean it though!