6 (?) to dinner

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Wed, 11 Oct 2023
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13 comments
 

6 sitting down to dinner.
Grown-ups talking.
One child sulking.
Shouted loudly, rudely,
sent to her room awhile:
while unruly.

5 sitting down to dinner.
The other child played with her food
and said she didn’t like it –
it was not good.
‘You ate too much before’,
said Mum,
‘You’d better get down if you don’t want more.’

4 sitting down to dinner,
now they could talk more freely.
Call comes shrilly:
‘I need someone. I’m on the loo!’:
One parent goes to do
what needs to be done.

3 sitting down to dinner,
chatting seriously.
‘Awww!!! I’ve pinched my finger!’
Other parent doesn’t linger,
leaves quickly.

Grandparents remaining.
Conversation flags.
(They have plenty of other time to talk!
so peace and quiet momentarily)

but soon there were 3, then 4,
then 5 again:
and adult conversation interweaving
with child's acceptable-interruptions!
The mealtime doesn’t drag!

[Not exactly autobiographical!]

[IP: A group of not more than six people are sitting at a table. What happen next? Surprise us!]

Certificate U
Poem
Families
Drama
Humour
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

What a lovely IP response Rhiannon - along the lines of ten green bottles - thank you!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, I thought it would raise a smile! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

And thank you for the cherries. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

Cleverly done, Rhiannon. A poem of moving parts that come together to tell an entertaining story. Paul :) 

 

[Think that should say "dinner" in the first line] 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Ooops!! thank you, Paul, for the typo and the comment. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I found this poem of a family life around the dinner table you've created very amusing, it reminded me of moments from my past, sharing those mealtimes in large family gatherings.

Nicely done Rhiannon.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jenny. Glad you enjoyed. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

I wonder how many families still sit around a table for meals? It is sad. It is part of ages old rituals an integral part of society and life. I know from when I lived alone, especially supper it felt so wierd and spooky on your own.

And as Jenny said, all the best! Tom

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Tom. Yes, it is such a way for families to keep the contact and know and understand each other and each other's problems. And as you say, children can feel isolated, needing that care and interest. Sad that it has begun to drop away so much. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

What a cute idea for the challenge, Rhiannon.  And much of it could relate to most households I am sure 

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jean! I hope you are enjoying the reading. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by forest_for_ever on

Oh what memories...loved this one.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you! Family memories! Rhiannon