a city fable

Cherry

By Nolan

Sat, 28 Sep 2024
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6 comments
 

when the storm of black snow
and acid rain tears
as the dark smoke clears
if there in the starless sky
the neon bow appears

for you to have happiness and joy
so goes the ages old fable dear boy
a treasure is locked
a chest in old rusted chains bound
at the neon bow's end to be found
.
search well child with hope and faith
follow it in gray days, nights of fear
over black rivers and concrete cliffs
never not once look back

if you walked many thousands hours
you might find the lost blue sapphires
and
a little patch of sun
 

Certificate U
Story
shadow of death
Science fiction

Comments

Submitted by Nolan on

The poem  is based on the Afrikaans song "Sprokie vir 'n stadskind".

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

It sounds like searching  out from the smoky city for the blue skies and brightness of the countryside? Reminiscent of the cities in the height of the industrial revolution and those who came in for mill-work etc as farmworkers not needed so much.? You do speak Afrikaans? Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Nolan on

You are on the mark, but further it is supposed to be prophetic, as is the original song. The blue sapphires I think might be more for the sea.

Our mother tongue was Afrikaans Rhiannon, dad was English.

Thank-You! Keep well Rhannon! Nolan &&

 

Submitted by Nolan on

Cherries!

 

Submitted by marandina on

"..when the storm of black snow
and acid rain tears.."

Lovely imagery and you can feel the folklore. Very nicely done, Nolan.

 

Submitted by Nolan on

Thanks! du Plessis's prophetic song is brilliant. Nolan &