Let it snow …

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Wed, 08 Jan 2025
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with apologies to A A Milne*

Jane has a great big padded coat on
Jane has a scarf and furry hat
Jane has warm mitts, thick socks and  boots on,
and that (said Jane) is that:
so
I can go out to play
in the snow today:
snowballs and snowman
chase Dad and fall down
lie in the snow, wave arms
to make a ‘snow angel’s wings
which brings
cheeks red and stinging
eyes bright and grinning
til
back in the house
out of the cold,
shed all the layers,
numb fingers thawing,
all over glowing
cosy and happy
and sleepy…

[IP: “Out Of The Cold”.]

*https://allpoetry.com/poem/8518945-Happiness-by-A.A.-Milne
https://voetica.com/poem/3354

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Comments

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Playful and innocent. I could never really understand what you mean by "with apologies to ... " closest I can guess is something like "please excuse the plagiarism, (if you can see it)". At least you did give the origin that helps. Honestly. And in this case it all is just very ordinary prose, save perhaps for "to make a ‘snow angel’s wings" So you're quite safe.

Wales must have an incredibly versatile climate as well, apart from such a diverse wildlife. I would like to visit someday.

See you Rhiannon! Tom

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I always think of the 'with apologies to' as a polite acknowledgement of some ideas based on or even parodying another composition, but I wouldn't think of it as plagriarism which I think is actual using someone else's writing and pretending it is your own. This piece is slightly mimicing A A Milne's famous fun piece. We don't actually live in Wales, but close. The snow we had last weekend didn't last long, so pretty while it lasted and fun for the children, but glad to see it go really! Thanks for reading and commenting, Tom. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Nolan on

In that case I wouldn't bother - apologising. Ideas belong to everyone it's poetry no industrial espionage &&

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I've always thought of it as a fun phrase to show you got help from someone's structure idea, or are referring to some piece, and so I thought more of an acknowldegement than really an apology. I thought it was used in a case like this as humorous allusion

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for the cherries! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by forest_for_ever on

Absolutely delightful.  You are still clearly at the peak of your powers.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

!! Glad you enjoyed, thanks! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Nolan on

Why? Hope not, not yet!

 

Submitted by Kris on

& fun to read.... I can play in that*laughyes

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed the experience! Rhiannon