Alien Shores

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Sat, 13 Sep 2008
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10 comments
 

Pavements shine
electric blue
forever amber.

Street-lamps
neon signs
spring alive –
prematurely
falteringly
flicker.

Fat-cats
vie for cabs
folded broadsheets
to their heads.

Shop-girls
dodge puddles
rush for doorways
root for scarves
and brollies.

Above my head
a young girl stands
freeze-framed
at an open window
of a down-town dive.

Orange dress
jet-black hair
swept high
into a chignon.

An upward draught
wafts the down
on her neck.

She waves
to a passer-by.
They seem to heckle
He disappears inside.

Like a scene
from a foreign movie.

No sub-titles required.

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Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'Pavements shine electric blue forever amber.' I love the use of colours here! The whole poem has a great sense of atmosphere and the last line is a brilliant finish.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks Magic. In fact, 'Forever Amber' and 'Electric Blue' were quite famous movies, wayback. Way before your time I should imagine:-) When I have a moment, later today, I shall 'google' them and find out the dates, etc. Glad you enjoyed the poem. Have a sunny Sunday.

 

Submitted by tamara on
"Like a scene from a foreign movie,no sub-titles required."That is brilliant,the whole poem is kicking with life!x

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Tamara - thanks for that. Glad my poem had such a dynamic effect on you. Tina:-)

 

Submitted by chuck on
You paint a vivid picture with a few words and the movie references work well. This is my idea of good poetry.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Ta ever so, chuck. Your words much appreciated. Tina:-)

 

Submitted by Ewan on
And you end this poem very well. That's what I call poetry too. As opposed to the anthology of a similar name, LOL. Really good stuff, you are in a rich vein of form at the moment regards Ewan.

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hats off you to you, Ewan. Thank you for your words of encouragement - which at the end of the day, we all need. Tina

 

Submitted by shoebox on
Randall BarfieldIt's super because it's fresh and has a great length. Last line is a gem. Cheers

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
My thanks to you:-) Tina