House of Dreams

By Bradene

Fri, 24 Oct 2008
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The house is silent, settled for the night
our hearts beat quietly, time travels slow.
As dreams cascade through halls of purest light;

strange new life bathed in a beautiful sight
surreal imaginings of sleep life flow.
The house is silent settled for the night,

senses heighten in this strange exciting flight
where all events appear to shrink then grow;
As dreams cascade through halls of purest light.

Silk like, inside the shells of oysters white
Cocooned and sheltered as the pearl from snow.
The house is silent settled for the night.

Quite unexpectedly we take a fright
and nightmares run through for a beat or so,
then dreams cascade through halls of purest light;

once again visions turn into delight,
calm all fears before the dawn’s trumpets blow.
The house is silent, settled for the night
As dreams cascade through halls of purest light.

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Comments

Submitted by shoebox on
I love that line: The house is silent, settled for the night. I like its repetition. In one or two you have a comma, in another you don't. It's better with the comma, I think. Cheers

Submitted by Bradene on
The Idea is to make the repetative lines mean different things or to put a different emphasis on the meaning of the line, and also to make it flow as freely as you can. They are notoriously difficult to write. Thanks for commenting I really appreciate your thoughts Val