UMBRELLAS

By Cavalcader

Mon, 15 Jun 2009
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9 comments
 

Out come the umbrellas again
all colours shapes big and shiny
I achieved one now with Audrey Hepburn on?

some are broken from the wind and
torrential rain
in comes the cat standing on his brain
they do if it's thundery or stormy!

Flowers worms frogs boots and birds
wellingtons, jackets with hoods waterproof
water tubs filling up leaky shoes

two have just done the garden for me'
covered in muck! and mud! and weeding
called out for coffee !please
they found our lost green frog
oh hide' it while the cat!s about.

the pink blossom is by the washing line
I do wish the pouring rain would stop
and it would be fine.

Oh' there's a blue-tit with a worm
in his mouth

the daughter and friend
have dug and hoed and no regrets
ther'e both thrilled for me the
hard work in the garden was worth
all the sweat?
cavalcader julie

Certificate U
Poem
Humour

Comments

Submitted by Jupiter on
Hi Julie. There's a lot of good stuff here for me. You are definitely improving in my eyes. Of course you know I'd like to steal bits and put them in my own words don't you? ;-) ha! ha!. But I won't :) lol I particuarly like this part "Flowesrs,worms,frogs boots and birds wellington,jackets with hoods waterproof water tubs filling up,leaky shoes" Well done. Keep it up. I enjoyed this piece.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I couldn't agree with Jupiter more, Julie. This is a very colourful, descriptive piece which I enjoyed. Tina

 

Submitted by jennifer on
Hi Julie, When you post work, it's worth checking it through for typos and 'editing'. There are several in here that detract from a really lovely poem, J x

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
nEW hI! Jennifer Thankyou comment when your completely new all of this NO one knows phrases,Typos,Stanzas etc:etc; I am up dating all now. and re:ridiculous not to expect comments.NO ONE Knows what they are if never done.Then any piece to them they feel! so good! just to be able to do it? But sorry a teacher would know of course any subject. The Letters at Top Headings at first didn't mean a thing to me!and to learn computer not mine and hubby always in same room and t.v. not easy. and many I think.If live own can please themselves It's like my toy making have a go.Learn and forget Some quick,some slow. Don't you think. and hubby is a criticiser no help.at school reports be Doen't listen, etc:try harder. so will. I was recently on Forum I never put my name.Now it's gone why. thankyou all.can delete if you wish.Hope well. julie cavalcader x hope understand me.

Submitted by Margharita on
I loved the lines 'in comes the cat standing on his brain/they do if it's thundery or stormy'. Indeed they do! I've never heard it better put.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
Hi' Jennifer Thankyou yes I agree with you, but if your new Im trying climb the ladder I only wanted to shove these on, and hope to get remarks it is not my computer.Iv'e lost my reply to you pressed wrong button and I have 2 very judgemental. I don't know all these words if I review 1st have quickily whoops pressed wrong button. "Love me do" was the Beatles great,number and "It's been a hard days night." "I wanna hold your hand". thankyou I'll try harder. julie x

Submitted by Cavalcader on
Thankyou Silver-Spun I have pressed wrong button lost lst previous reply, yes you are so correct but in all adversity and much more done for me,and others. Iv'e cut things down, re Poem Oh' for a bed for the homeless." with God +so much can do, and through Fthr . I have achieved so much, and othersI just wanted to shove these on and see what people thought ! I Prayed comments ABCtales - and my word readings?? gone up,but God said many things will be added to you and others maybe able to use or are identifying with me. "cavalcader" the L mistake my belated mum got me in it with her as an xtra Theatre Royal. thanks comments. julie X must read some more lovely works here I understand how people feel in stories and poems.here now.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
Margharita wow thanks when I was young child mum always said cats on his brain I thought that's mad,but he would call round into a ball almost on his head, I really enjoying reading all your marvellous works, Jennifer;s was 1st compliment, I prayed and readings shot up, must read some of peoples works sorry frien'ds Hubby's computer got to go. Got dinner ready I like my story Humpty Dumpty falling of the ladder. julie cavalderl

Submitted by Cavalcader on
Hi'Jupiter many thanks it's the writing group, we only make up words, pictures etc and homeless and few older go? into books free filmed dancing.acting poems and host Odeon oscars wow. But my back gives way, so wonderful daughter and friend come and do, I entered comp; fun, but collected what done in £1 file, so hence put gradually all on here 'apart paying out 3 put in books all others in , so many words and lines pay all time they do printing send 3 choose one of all.can't to do anymore, too expensive but wonderful see your name and read others poems. I wanted to see what others thought I prayed comment wow readings shot up? abctales, never heard of, Of course you can use any words or descriptions, sometimes repeats every where titles horses poems stories butterflies and all. thankyou must read more others works expressions sad happy funny all good love humour whatever, not my computer. His. thankyouoo julie got to go.keep comments coming.