MAGNIFICENT GIFTS poem

By Richard L. Provencher

Sat, 04 Jul 2009
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Magnificent Gifts

join the pause of early
morning, flowers blossoming in
a pot-pourri
of accolades, wind shuffling

Poplar limbs in shivering
praise, their tinkling
decibels of calm across
the charm of sky.

Sparrows strut within the
farm, sheep watchful, crouching
and patient

for their keeper of the pens
needing arousal from his
night of restless sleep.

© 2005 Richard L. Provencher
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first published Spring – Summer 2006
Carousel Vol 19 ISSN 0835-7994
University of Guelph, Guelph, Ontario

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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
This is beautiful, Richard. This stanza in particular:- "Poplar limbs in shivering praise, their tinkling decibels of calm across the charm of sky." Tina

 

Submitted by sarah wilson on
Lovely:) sarah

Submitted by Jupiter on
Hi Nathan (and please excuse me Richard :) ) Would it be at all possible for you to elaborate on your comment please so that I may learn from it? "The rhythm fits the piece just right and the imagery is wonderfully crafted as it is not an 'obvious' metaphor or simile, which is not easy to achieve. Please assume I understood very little of what you said. :) Thanks.

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Thank you, Tina and Nathan for your penetrating comments. They are very touching, and I am personally honoured to have observations from folks, whom I believe to be excellent writers. And also, thank you Jupiter for your voice of encouragement. Richard LP
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Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Thank you so much, Sarah. I remember years ago, several editors of journals said, "You won't get Nature poetry published, since it was not the kind of thing people read." I was determined to prove them wrong, since much of the poetry coming across their journals was tripe, full of raw sex and filthy words adorning their writings. So glad to see that kind of junk writing, which did get published, is now not acceptable. None of my writing has swear words; not really necessary to get one's point across. Phew. Sorry for the soap box. Richard LP.
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Submitted by Jupiter on
Hi Nathan. Thank you very much for replying. This form of writing and the language used to describe it are outside of my normal comfort zone. Whilst I attempt to be as direct as possible in my own work I do see the advantage of widening my audience with the use of cleverer techniques. Today is street party day where I live so I will take a much closer look at what you have said tomorrow. In the meantime, thank you very much for your help. :-)

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Well defined, Nathan. Thank you for that. Another tack I use is to look beyond the pretty bird, stretching wings as it settles on a branch. I want to portray its intentions; to rest its overused wings, to hide from preying feathers, or to simply settle into a relaxing moment gazing upon its own world. Richard LP
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