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Cherry

By Beeme

Sun, 08 Nov 2009
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14 comments
 

I look over at you,
your shaking hands remembering
the touch of a bayonet.

I pray for you,
to close your grey eyes to the sound
of guns.

I promise you,
the trinket box of brotherhood will
never be forgotten.

I sing to you,
the national anthem against the hum
of the machine gun.

I hold for you,
the poppy wreath entwined with
your memories.

I cry for you,
as the cries of your brothers still
echo across the beaches at sun rise.

I remember you,
as your ageing heart may slow down
and rest with the poppies.

The poppies that bow their heads in
the fields saluting you.

Standing caped with everlasting pride.

Certificate U
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by pinda on
Beeme, this piece is really touching. Rememberance day piece? If so, then you got your point across in a lovely, sad, sentimental way. Well done, great choice for the name aswell, fits perfectly. I would quote my favorite verse, but the are all fabulous. Just letting you know, I still read your work, just have less time to comment. You're voice in poetry has grown since Jupiter was around. Well done :)I've always loved your poetry and will continue to read yours. I always tell my wife when I really really enjoy your work. She also says your a great writer for your age. x Take care Peace Pinda

Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou so much Pinda! Really glad you and your wife enjoy my work x

k.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
This is so beautiful and very moving. A more than fitting tribute. Have a peaceful Sunday, Beeme. Tina xx

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou Tina! I am so glad you think so. I am not too sure about the last stanza though, doesn't seem to work quite as well, I'll have a think. Have a peaceful sunday to xx

k.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Beeme This is amazing piece to all then lost lives and injured You could put it in somewhere and money could go heroes etc; been watching x Factor take care late, Have you bought Abc Mugs yet I have 2 there great getting tiny stcikers for it 99p. julie xx cavalcader (;-

Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou Juile, I haven't got a abc mug but sounds good :)

k.

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I agree with Tina, a wonderful tribute Beeme and I think the repetition works really well! ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou magic!

k.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Beeme Million well dones on the cherry On such a very difficult poem Poppies" to do, so beautifully done. But you are brilliant so young poet and can condense all together. Almost if you lost or knew someone who died, or injured from wars. I only thought just now if only all over the world pray and change whole situation . I remember holding a bearer flag is it. when I was 12 years old at cene'otaph with another girl from Brit;Red Cross Society then.It was enormous to hold and walk steps I was so short. Could,t go anywhere this year bug.Last year stood at one children and elderly man all his medals took salute and we spoke him . "At The Going Down Of The Sun" And in the early morning to We will remember them" and some so young as well But all someone's loved ones. oh' abc mugs under side list ! headings etc; press to order and pay. hope your well.xx julie cavalcader(;

Submitted by sarah wilson on
This is one of your best Beeme, deceptively simple use of words. Less is definitely more here. Very well deserved cherry. xxx

Submitted by Lennie on
Well done beeme, I love alot of our poems but this one stands out from the rest, a really thoughtfull poem great work. Lennie x

Lennie

Submitted by Beeme on
Thanks a millon sarah and lennie! x

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you for the cherry abctales.

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thakyou so much,Nathan. Your words are greatly appreciated x

k.