THE VOICE, THE CHOICE, MY FRIENDS REJOICE

By kheldar

Thu, 11 Feb 2010
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The voice, the voice
Once more the voice,
Whispering he's got no choice;
Tomorrow he must end it all
Take a leap from structure tall,
Or make a meal of his pills
Sure to cure him of his ills.

A choice, a choice
He has a choice,
He need not listen to the voice;
He can choose the path of life
Work to conquer pain & strife,
From structure tall enjoy the view
Use his pills to pull him through.

The voice, the voice
Once more the voice,
But my friends we can rejoice;
He has found the wherewithal
To countermand its nightly call,
Its whisperings are all in vain
He will not pay it heed again.

Rejoice, rejoice
He's made his choice,
To live still, to still the voice.

COPYRIGHT D M PAMMENT 11th FEBRUARY 2010

Certificate 15
Poem
THE INNER CONDITION
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by jennifer on
Great stuff, but think what the voice actually says (he's got no choice; Tomorrow he must end it all Take a leap from structure tall, Or make a meal of his pills Sure to cure him of his ills), I think, would benefit from speech marks to SHOW it is the voice, if you will? J x

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Hi Jennifer, I was unsure whether or not to put in speechmarks, couldn't decide if reporting what was said was the same as quoting it, if you get my drift. I will ponder on your valued input David x :--)

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Submitted by shoe on
I really enjoyed this, A word that has been with me for many a year is fortitude, (it featured a lot in a book I read when young) and this poem depicts it in spades, xx

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thanks Shirley xx :--)

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Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Love the comparison drawn in these lines: 'Take a leap from structure tall, Or make a meal of his pills Sure to cure him of his ills.' and 'From structure tall enjoy the view Use his pills to pull him through.' Really works ;) Glad the person in question pulled through! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thanks Rebecca, I'm glad that bit worked. David xx :--) P.S. The voice isn't yet still, but "the person in question" is working on it

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