Here With Her

Cherry

By cormacru999

Mon, 18 Jul 2011
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10 comments
 

I could wake
Here
Every morning

Not this room,
Not this drive
Or even this town -

I could wake
Here
Every morning
Under this sun
Next to her
This beautiful girl.

Certificate U
Poems
Opinion

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Less is more, cormacru, as you demonstrate here, so well. Tina

 

Submitted by cormacru999 on
Even though I write some long poems, I appreciate the short ones most. I like them when they're short and clear.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I like this one very much - well done

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New cormacru999 Yes, I enjoyed so small and all compact, with the sun and a beautiful girl. I should really try cut mine down learning think. Congrats: on the cherry! julie

Submitted by cormacru999 on
sometimes I write out a big long piece and then leave it alone for a few month, until I'm not attached to the work as much. and then I tear out all the extra and see what's left. often that's the best way for me to figure out what I'm really trying to say. If its not a story, then it should just be a statement.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by Highhat on
Yes this is a very clear statement C999- short and very sweet- so simply put and yet poignant. Beautiful ;)Pia

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
I agree - this is so, so sweet indeed, congrats on the cherries, such a beautiful little poem :)

Submitted by cormacru999 on
I've been very lucky on this site to be picked so often. I'm really appreciative and grateful for the attention and the compliments. joining this site has been very rewarding. I look forward to reading more of everyone's work as well. thank you.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by V.C.Willow on
Very sweet. As said before sometimes less is more

Submitted by InspiredWriter on
Simplicity is romantic, excellent. IWx

Noah